Turn Around

Daybreak in a foreign land Sights so bright Drenched in history The sun sparkling through the morning mist Vision blurred by squinted eyes A silhouette draping a wooden bench The baby sparrow hungrily cries Walk right past she looks at me Was she the one from my dream I stare right back to let her know Our two eyes lock, there is a gleam Oh vision bright and beautiful Come take my hand and walk with me A journey we both do need Turn around and comfort me
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Yvonne Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 5:15 PM
Oh so, so, good! A very creative write! Excellent!
Devonshire Avatar
November 16, 2014 at 3:56 PM
Would that I were she, Tim. A man who gives so much support and comfort to others would surely capture my heart! If this is for the "love in an ancient place" contest, you have a winner for sure! Love, Carolyn
Vaso Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 10:50 PM
Wow, Tim you have outdone yourself here, one of the best I have read in a long time! cheers!
Dietrich Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 12:06 AM
this is very atmospheric, Tim, how you place it in a historical other land. I really like it.
Nance Avatar
November 14, 2014 at 6:29 PM
An enchanting free verse, capturing your moment. Well done Tim.
Chircop Avatar
November 14, 2014 at 3:17 PM
I turned around to find. a silhouette. close to a wooden bench..and all dreams were.bright and beautiful..Enchanting poem..To my favs Coach!
Meade Avatar
November 14, 2014 at 2:54 PM
Capturing the moment when two eye meet -- what a perfect moment . . . fire shot through me. The last line is awesome . . . it allowed me to image endless opportunities . . . keep dreaming my friend . . . they do come true!!
Allison Avatar
November 14, 2014 at 2:13 PM
beautifully romantic Tim I hope your dream comes true my friend:-) Hugs Jan xx
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