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Turbulent Sea

Turbulent Sea

Sorrow draws me back to this empty beach.
Where my sons used to frolick in the sand.
Both are lost to me. No longer within my reach.
I'll mourn them forever, my big boy, my little man.

I dwell in limbo, for each day I miss them more.
Sweet freckled noses, and brown puppy dog eyes.
Roar if you must, angry waves upon the shore.
You'll not stifle the wails of their mother's cries.

I curse you, Neptune's thief!  You, who stole my sons.
You may as well have drowned me in the depth of the sea.
I'd forgive you without revenge, for taking my little ones,
If only your next tide would bring them safely home to me. 

Lin Lane ~ 10/30/15

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Connie Marcum Wong November 20, 2015 at 10:10 AM Joy and tragedy flow with the sea and your sensitive expression of the ladder is penned beautifully. Congratulations on your wonderful first place win Lin! Lin Lane November 20, 2015 at 10:36 AM Thanks, Connie, for your thoughts and congratulations.

Paul Callus November 18, 2015 at 12:16 PM Hi Lin...I am glad that this is only fiction, although you make it sound so real! Love your creative take on this inspiring picture...sad and lovingly rendered. Congrats on your top placement! // paul Lin Lane November 18, 2015 at 12:25 PM I'm pleased to see you visit, Paul, and thank you, too. I did check with Eve before writing it to be sure nothing tragic had befallen either of those little boys.

John Lawless November 18, 2015 at 8:22 AM ...and still men and women set sail on the sea of life's adventure. Well done Lin. Lin Lane November 18, 2015 at 12:22 PM tis true, John. The mysterious sea calls to many. I've always wandered what I'd find on the ocean floor if I could clear a mile of ocean...anywhere in the world. However, it's home to sea creatures, and I don't wanna tangle with sharks! Thank you for visiting.

Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2015 at 7:44 AM I'm glad to read this is a work of fiction. Congratulations on your win. Lin Lane November 18, 2015 at 7:48 AM Thank you, Richard. If it'd been based on reality I couldn't have written it.

Skat A November 17, 2015 at 9:56 PM Lin, Congratulations, Have a nice day. SKAT Lin Lane November 17, 2015 at 9:57 PM Thank you, SKAT.

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores November 17, 2015 at 7:13 PM Congratulations Lin Lin Lane November 17, 2015 at 7:53 PM Thanks, Nayda... and I'll return my congrats to you for your placement. ;)

Jan Allison November 17, 2015 at 6:41 PM Dropping back with my congrats Lin :-) Hugs Jan xx Lin Lane November 17, 2015 at 6:44 PM thanks Jan...and in case I miss sending you a note Congrats to you for a win.

Peter Dome November 2, 2015 at 6:17 AM Highly emotionally and visual. You are a very talented writer, with a gift for touching others hearts with your words, that's one thing that makes a writer great. Very well done. best wishes. Pete. Lin Lane November 2, 2015 at 6:34 AM I appreciate your kind praises, and accept them with humility.

Pandita Sietesantos October 31, 2015 at 5:22 AM What an excellent emotive piece you have crafted, my friend! It tugged at my heart and I love it! It's a 7! All the best. Pandita Lin Lane October 31, 2015 at 11:15 AM You're very kind, Pandita, with your comments and your 7. Thank you so much.

Kim Merryman October 30, 2015 at 11:43 PM Wow! This packs a powerful emotional punch! Great work! Love, Kim (I hope this is a work of fiction) Lin Lane October 31, 2015 at 12:06 AM Thank you very much, Kim. It's a rather morbid piece of fiction, but it was the first idea that came to my mind, so I let it take me where IT wanted to go.

Jan Allison October 30, 2015 at 4:31 PM Oh lin this is a heartbreaking write but for anyone who has experienced loss like this - it is coming up to almost a year since my sons friends (brothers) died in a tragic incident with drugs and the first 2 stanzas of the poem are so poignant as we live on a little Island:-( hugs jan xx 7 Lin Lane October 30, 2015 at 4:35 PM Thank you, Jan. I hesitated to post this one after I read it, but I wanted to enter Eve's contest. I only wish that somehow I could've gotten her extraordinary painting to upload on the site. I got it everywhere except where it needed to go. I appreciate you reading it, and I hope it doesn't offend anyone. hugs back ((Jan))