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Trying,,

You lie awake at night, Thinking, Wondering, Searching through the webs of Lies, Death, Cheat, Heartbreak that life has brought you. There's no one to help you near by. No one to comfort you. To tell you everything will be fine. You're on your own. You can die trying OR You can die trying Alone. -Brittany- (thank you for reading and if you may please comment and rate i like to read what people say.. thank you)

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Dan Kearley

Date: 9/30/2011 2:39:00 PM

Hi, I came back to check on it.Much better!... :-) Just let your words flow now.You have this talent swimming around in your head.Express your feelings with words of poetry.It may be your new light.Just try not to let the sadness overtake your poetry.... :-)

Dan Kearley

Date: 9/30/2011 12:49:00 PM

Hello Brittany,I was a little confused with the 2 lines together.And "your on your own" doesn't seem to match with "die trying alone" I'm just trying to be helpful this is not ment to be rude in any way.Maybe a little reworking?Just a little :-)

Brittany Andrews
Date: 9/30/2011 12:50:00 PM

Thank you :) haha ill change it :)