Try

If you can't succeed by trying you should try again denying, as your second time in trying means you're never meant denying.

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/17/2019 8:28:00 PM

Hello Trevor McLeod, this poem makes a lot of sense. If you do not succeed try,try, again. a good motto. It is nice to meet you. have anice evening my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 4/20/2019 2:20:00 PM

There is nothing wrong with this poem. If you feel you must do more with this poem then do so, i like it the way it is. Happy Easter. have a nice day my friend.

Trevor Mcleod
Date: 4/18/2019 8:14:00 AM

Thanks Darlene. I was actually trying to say more. I was trying to say that sometimes trying the same thing has different outcome. You've got me wanting to rewrite this now. LOL Thanks for that. I'll see if I can come up with something. Trevor