Truthful Words Echo

Your truthful words still echo ...   ...   ...
Within my hollow    h e a r t
Like a bear within a |c|a|g|e|
As it is t o   r    n       a   p  a r t

All the little pieces sca t   t   e    r    like shadows from the light.

A host of silent sentinels
With nothing left to guard
Yet the [doors] are locked
And all the windows b-a-r-r-e-d

Affirming my suspicion that you, in fact, were right. 

In my soul's deepest
                                      cellar
A place I rarely tread
I buried in a shallow grave 
That thing I thought was d_e_a_d

                                                                  gone
I thought I would be safe then with it           from my sight.

But now if I walk by the [door]
Or if I glance inside to check
The black tendrils ~~ of regret ~~~~~
become a noose around my (neck)

As if by wicked vagabonds,  I'm dragged 
                                                                 back into
                                                                                 the night.



9/22/16
All the Little Pieces Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Merryman Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 4:13 PM
Very creative presentation, Jesse! Also well written. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim
La France Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 9:55 AM
Jesse, congratulations on your first place win in my contest, this is an amazing deep and meaningful poem, so c r e a t i v e . I just love it.
Rowe Avatar
September 26, 2016 at 9:29 AM
Thank you. If it wasn't for your challenge to NOT make it a "stuck to the left margin" poem, that is probably what this would have been. I really haven't experimented much with using this style so thanks for the challenge.
Neumann Avatar
September 23, 2016 at 7:13 AM
Very clever write and layout. Congratulations, Kai
Daniel Avatar
September 23, 2016 at 6:05 AM
Well written with a layout suiting each word, Jesse:) congratulations on top win:)
Rowe Avatar
September 23, 2016 at 7:13 AM
Thank you, Jo.
Haight Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 7:42 PM
Such a powerfully written poem of regret, Jesse, and your layout of phrases and words enhance the sad imagery. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win. Sandra
Rowe Avatar
September 23, 2016 at 7:12 AM
Thank you. It is truly am honor because there were many deserving poems in this competition.
Krampe Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 5:04 PM
Congrats on your win, Jesse. Interesting rhyme scheme, and I like what you did with the layout. I love the phrase "black tendrils of regret"! Agnes
Rowe Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 6:49 PM
Thank you. I definitely went full tilt with the guideline of not using standard form. This was an interesting convention to explore.
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