Trouble Below the Patapsco River

big bulbs flashed like a discotheque strobe light.
it’s always midnight.
his breath filled the cavernous abyss.
his heart at risk of jumping to its death.
the shell of his flesh colder than a poikilotherm.
shudder of his lens.
 a missing eye, a snake besides.
the hair on his arms like spikes.

why’d he follow trouble below the Patapsco River?
his eyes blood orange like the eagle owl.
too late to remember that curiosity killed the cat.
the narrow way wolf gray and white.

the body left in the open. the killer knew
he attracted an extra hide, and Justin
knew he was being hunted. this tunnel abandoned
since the lockdown. he followed the dodge
which had a hand hanging out through the brake light
red and waving.

he witnessed the whisk,
away the icy serpent flew.
Justin could feel his hot breath
the beast with centipede eyes.

he knows he’ll never make it out alive
even as he takes shot after shot.

the scream, the screech
of a van down the street.
he jumps in.
Go! Go! Go!

the tire wheels spin and smoke.
no time to choke.

van stops —
the director yells cut

1/26/2021
MURDER IN THE TUNNEL
SPONSOR: Kai Neumann

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 1/28/2021 9:05:00 AM
wow, how original. WELL Done with a great twist at the end.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/30/2021 3:58:00 PM
Thank you so much!
Date: 1/28/2021 2:10:00 AM
Ha very good Kim, was wondering where this was going, led us on a nice trip, great read great ending, cheers David
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/28/2021 6:48:00 AM
Thank you, David! :)
Date: 1/27/2021 4:31:00 AM
The ending gives the impression that this is a film in the making. Quite a thriller. ~~
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/27/2021 8:43:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 1/26/2021 9:42:00 PM
Well Kim, you have just shown me my first 'on film set' The imagery is superb, took me in there, and i loved every bit of it...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/27/2021 3:49:00 AM
Thanks so much, Harry!
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