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Tripping the Light

….,,,,,.. … ,. , reds of tango dancing on soaked light… foot crushes watchful roses ©modern haiku ……………. *Dance like nobody’s watching! Cindy MacMillan’s “ Creativity—Write a Modern Haiku By: nette onclaud

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/11/2011 2:34:00 PM

Interesting work..Makes me wonder exactly what happened..Good luck in the contest..Reads like a winners' circle to me..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Gwendolen Song

Date: 12/9/2011 6:43:00 AM

Nette...just HOW do u write with such descriptiveness? Dang!!! I think it'd take me a lifetime to create such intense pictures. I am in love with your FLARE!!! Gwendolen ps..congrats....congrats....congrats....

Kash Poet

Date: 12/8/2011 11:56:00 PM

Just wonderful Nette!Congrats on your win.Post some poems soon.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2011 11:26:00 PM

by the way, Nette. Didn't you have a contest a long time ago? It didn't get judged, did it? I was just wondering about it.......(am I getting that right?)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2011 11:25:00 PM

WAY to GO, nette. Great imagery here, and congratulations on your win. (whatever happened about that thing we have been discussing on soupmail? Let me know!)

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 12/8/2011 5:51:00 PM

congrats on your win nette, creative modern haiku here, so vivid and pretty :-)

Kim Merryman

Date: 12/8/2011 4:14:00 PM

A vivid picture. Congrats on your win, Nette! Kim

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/8/2011 3:49:00 PM

painterly banter here! Congrad's on your win Light & Love

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 12/8/2011 1:09:00 PM

Ah I could somehow picture you, nette! This is such a vivid haiku for me, enjoyed reading this and I hope your asthma is better (oops sorry asthma pala)-- Super congrats on your win! hugs :D

Edward Mccormick

Date: 12/8/2011 12:20:00 PM

So very lovely, Nette, your pretty poem is! ~ECMc

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer

Date: 12/8/2011 12:19:00 PM

Look at you Nette-just great! A big congrats. to you :)!

David Williams

Date: 12/8/2011 12:17:00 PM

Nette congrats on your win..David

Bl Devnath

Date: 12/8/2011 11:50:00 AM

Congrats on your win, my friend.bl

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/8/2011 11:00:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in Cyndi's "Creativity" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/4/2011 8:16:00 PM

lol... very creative... good luck in the contest,..p.d.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2011 5:00:00 PM

Nette. you have lots of good knowledge of american expressions such as tripping the lights fantastic. How did you become so aware of them all? Love your creative topic, dancing like nobody is watching. haha!! That's the best way.

Kash Poet

Date: 12/4/2011 11:15:00 AM

Lovely haiku here.Enjoyed.

Russell Sivey

Date: 12/4/2011 2:09:00 AM

Wow Nette, this is truly a fascinating write! It simple feels like I'm in a tango with a great pick-up artist! I especially enjoy the "watchful roses" as if they know what's going to happen to them during this fantastic poem! Perfect write!!

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/4/2011 1:51:00 AM

Enjoyed this modern piece Nette "like a fresh breath) how are things..? also i am sending you s/mail..!