Paul Callus Poet Senryu

Triple Act

Virginity test
Two lovers gasping for air
Mutual resistance


Tragic cliff-hangers
Two lovers gasping for air
In simulation


Gratification
Two lovers gasping for air
Simultaneously 


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Contest # 4
Sponsor: Poet Destroyer A
Placed: 4th

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Robert Lindley May 25, 2014 at 11:29 PM Congrats on your win!!!! Paul Callus May 26, 2014 at 10:49 AM Thank you Robert. Txs for stopping by. // paul

Sara Kendrick May 24, 2014 at 8:36 AM Way to go with a top win..Congrats.Sara Paul Callus May 24, 2014 at 4:57 PM Thank you Sara; a most welcome visit :) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser May 23, 2014 at 3:45 PM Kudos Paul..:) tea for a treat..:) I know this will do well..:) Paul Callus May 23, 2014 at 4:15 PM Thank you Olive_eloi:) I bought some Earl Grey black tea yesterday....we can have a cup together. :) // paul

Poet Destroyer A May 23, 2014 at 9:27 AM Thank you for the comment on my comment Paul....PD

Joseph May May 23, 2014 at 7:48 AM Congrats on your win Paul... Paul Callus May 23, 2014 at 12:28 PM Thank you Joseph; will be paying you a visit...paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma May 22, 2014 at 10:37 PM Lovely write Paul ! Wit always wins ,,, congrats on a wonderful win ! Paul Callus May 23, 2014 at 12:13 PM Always happy to receive your visits, Dr. Upma:) Thank you for the comments, too. // paul

Ivor Kos May 22, 2014 at 9:51 PM Congrats on this win! A Poem which I had previously enjoyed and commented on!!!! nifrahlek! Paul Callus May 23, 2014 at 12:03 PM Thank you Ivo! Grazzi mill-qalb (mill-qalb=from the heart). cu // paul

Poet Destroyer A May 22, 2014 at 9:40 PM Paul, again...Congratulations, I hope you enjoy your win and placement.... Stop by my latest blog, "The Glass SLipper" if you'd like. Take Care, and enjoy a smile or two. XOX~ LINDA Paul Callus May 23, 2014 at 6:39 AM Once again thank you Linda:) Honored to be on your winners' list. Going over now to "The Glass Slipper"; have a lovely day :) // paul

Poet Destroyer A May 20, 2014 at 12:27 PM Hello Paul, I'm smiling at you... LOL, love it... Sorry, for the early visit.. :) xox~ Linda Poet Destroyer A May 20, 2014 at 1:32 PM LOL, too late... Been impressed since I spotted the poem the first time... heheheh Paul Callus May 20, 2014 at 1:29 PM Thanks Linda, you are always welcome to visit; not saying anything else...just in case I'm judged as trying to impress the judge:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich May 18, 2014 at 4:02 PM very cleverly done, sir!!! Paul Callus May 18, 2014 at 5:00 PM Thank you Andrea. [Most of my ex-students still call me Sir!! :)] // paul

Jack Horne May 18, 2014 at 2:20 PM very clever write here, my friend Paul Callus May 18, 2014 at 2:38 PM Thank you Jack...glad to have you stopping by. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire May 17, 2014 at 3:09 PM How magically you worked the second line into three different scenarios. Love your senryu style, Paul! Wishing you success in the contest. Love, Carolyn Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 3:26 PM Thank you Carolyn for the lovely feedback. Yes, that second verse is the spine of this set of senryu. glad you enjoyed it :) cu // paul

Jan Allison May 17, 2014 at 8:09 AM Gosh Paul you covered all three bases in a few short words. really loved the imagery here. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan xxx Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 8:40 AM Thank you Jan! Glad you appreciated what's going on behind the screen (scene) of words. /x/ paul

Jake Ponce May 17, 2014 at 7:16 AM I like how these three verses cover diverse grounds. I like how they're interrelated and I most certainly was gasping for air because of your very smart use of words and imagery! \m/ Jake Ponce May 17, 2014 at 7:43 AM HAHAHA Soon, Paul. I haven't gotten over this :)) Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 7:42 AM Appreciate your thoughtful comments, Jake. Hope you've got your breath back!! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser May 17, 2014 at 3:40 AM hmmmmmmnn... :D this sounds three for me: intrigue, causing trouble and doing something naughty loools.. :D?!!! happy weekend PAul.. :D :P, GBU from Olive.. :) Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 6:34 AM Hi Olive_eloi :) Yes...these senryu tackle three different aspects of love-making. The 1st eventually leads to the 3rd; the 2nd touches on the negative. // Take care // paul

Leon Enriquez May 16, 2014 at 11:49 PM Dear Paul: Lovely write. Lovely read. Thank you. All the best then. Leon Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 6:21 AM My friend Leon...lovely visit and comments; may you have a safe journey to China and enjoy your holiday there. See you on your return (expecting a haiku written in Chinese!) // paul

Connie Marcum Wong May 16, 2014 at 8:14 PM I enjoyed this Paul. Senryu has such diversity available. Lovely and thought provoking poem. Thank you for commenting on my haiku too. Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 6:24 AM Good day Connie! Both haiku and senryu are worthy tools to work with. Enjoyed your latest post:) // paul

Ivor Kos May 16, 2014 at 7:42 PM Good job. So sweet and understandable. Peferct Senryu, Paul!! Eccellenti. Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 5:51 AM Hi Ivo! Glad you understood and liked. [eccellenti ... we derived that from the Italian 'eccellente'] Good...tajjeb! // paul

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen May 16, 2014 at 7:24 PM A good action. Paul Callus May 17, 2014 at 5:45 AM Thank you Muhammad. // paul