Triple Act

Virginity test Two lovers gasping for air Mutual resistance Tragic cliff-hangers Two lovers gasping for air In simulation Gratification Two lovers gasping for air Simultaneously ------------------------------- Contest # 4 Sponsor: Poet Destroyer A Placed: 4th

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Robert Lindley

Date: 5/25/2014 11:29:00 PM

Congrats on your win!!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/26/2014 10:49:00 AM

Thank you Robert. Txs for stopping by. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/24/2014 8:36:00 AM

Way to go with a top win..Congrats.Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 5/24/2014 4:57:00 PM

Thank you Sara; a most welcome visit :) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/23/2014 3:45:00 PM

Kudos Paul..:) tea for a treat..:) I know this will do well..:)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2014 4:15:00 PM

Thank you Olive_eloi:) I bought some Earl Grey black tea yesterday....we can have a cup together. :) // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/23/2014 9:27:00 AM

Thank you for the comment on my comment Paul....PD

Joseph May

Date: 5/23/2014 7:48:00 AM

Congrats on your win Paul...

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2014 12:28:00 PM

Thank you Joseph; will be paying you a visit...paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 5/22/2014 10:37:00 PM

Lovely write Paul ! Wit always wins ,,, congrats on a wonderful win !

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2014 12:13:00 PM

Always happy to receive your visits, Dr. Upma:) Thank you for the comments, too. // paul

Ivo Cos

Date: 5/22/2014 9:51:00 PM

Congrats on this win! A Poem which I had previously enjoyed and commented on!!!! nifrahlek!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2014 12:03:00 PM

Thank you Ivo! Grazzi mill-qalb (mill-qalb=from the heart). cu // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/22/2014 9:40:00 PM

Paul, again...Congratulations, I hope you enjoy your win and placement.... Stop by my latest blog, "The Glass SLipper" if you'd like. Take Care, and enjoy a smile or two. XOX~ LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2014 6:39:00 AM

Once again thank you Linda:) Honored to be on your winners' list. Going over now to "The Glass Slipper"; have a lovely day :) // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/20/2014 12:27:00 PM

Hello Paul, I'm smiling at you... LOL, love it... Sorry, for the early visit.. :) xox~ Linda

Poet Destroyer A
Date: 5/20/2014 1:32:00 PM

LOL, too late... Been impressed since I spotted the poem the first time... heheheh

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2014 1:29:00 PM

Thanks Linda, you are always welcome to visit; not saying anything else...just in case I'm judged as trying to impress the judge:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/18/2014 4:02:00 PM

very cleverly done, sir!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/18/2014 5:00:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. [Most of my ex-students still call me Sir!! :)] // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 5/18/2014 2:20:00 PM

very clever write here, my friend

Paul Callus
Date: 5/18/2014 2:38:00 PM

Thank you Jack...glad to have you stopping by. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/17/2014 3:09:00 PM

How magically you worked the second line into three different scenarios. Love your senryu style, Paul! Wishing you success in the contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2014 3:26:00 PM

Thank you Carolyn for the lovely feedback. Yes, that second verse is the spine of this set of senryu. glad you enjoyed it :) cu // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 5/17/2014 8:09:00 AM

Gosh Paul you covered all three bases in a few short words. really loved the imagery here. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2014 8:40:00 AM

Thank you Jan! Glad you appreciated what's going on behind the screen (scene) of words. /x/ paul

Jake Ponce

Date: 5/17/2014 7:16:00 AM

I like how these three verses cover diverse grounds. I like how they're interrelated and I most certainly was gasping for air because of your very smart use of words and imagery! \m/

Jake Ponce
Date: 5/17/2014 7:43:00 AM

HAHAHA Soon, Paul. I haven't gotten over this :))

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2014 7:42:00 AM

Appreciate your thoughtful comments, Jake. Hope you've got your breath back!! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/17/2014 3:40:00 AM

hmmmmmmnn... :D this sounds three for me: intrigue, causing trouble and doing something naughty loools.. :D?!!! happy weekend PAul.. :D :P, GBU from Olive.. :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2014 6:34:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi :) Yes...these senryu tackle three different aspects of love-making. The 1st eventually leads to the 3rd; the 2nd touches on the negative. // Take care // paul

Leon Enriquez

Date: 5/16/2014 11:49:00 PM

Dear Paul: Lovely write. Lovely read. Thank you. All the best then. Leon

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2014 6:21:00 AM

My friend Leon...lovely visit and comments; may you have a safe journey to China and enjoy your holiday there. See you on your return (expecting a haiku written in Chinese!) // paul