Traits

Fate held, unkind to breast amnesty's heart, thine to rest tomorrow, unknown chattel hope, stands alone in battle forgiveness, yours from love's ladle, pours another stolen day, borrows eyes keen, our tomorrows

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/29/2020 1:27:00 AM

This short poem has explosive words which make the poem about traits potent and powerful' Another stolen day, borrow eyes keen, our tomorrows' - so well penned! I have missed your commenting Richard, and hope that at some time you will read a few of my poems. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. Jennifer.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/30/2020 7:29:00 PM

Jennifer, Thank you for that wonderful comment. I would be honored to read your poetry. I hope your week-end has been as kind to you as you've been to me. "] -Richard

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/6/2020 8:24:00 AM

Very impressive work. I enjoyed reading this one. Sara

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/9/2020 2:31:00 PM

Sara, Thank you for this comment. I searched my memory for recognition of you and your poetry, though it's failed me time and again. Never mind that. Your wonderful poem 'the worker', with the heartbreaking epilogue left me wrung out like a dish rag. Grand children are a gift that waits far beyond the horizon of our youth. You know this more than most. I will say a prayer for your Grandson. -Richard

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/6/2020 8:21:00 AM

.... "tomorrow, unknown chattel" .... well written, Richard - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/9/2020 2:11:00 PM

Hello Anne-Lise, Thanks, though I must admit, I had to try it on to make sure that it fit. Yes, I've been lurking more, participating less. I'm still getting used to the new mask I must wear. I already have so many others. -Richard

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 8/5/2020 9:51:00 PM

I like the contrasts here, like 'hope/battle' and 'stolen/borrows' - very intriguing -

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/9/2020 2:04:00 PM

Hello Michelle, Thank you for this comment. I hope it's not impolite to say. But your name has a special place in my lexicon of life. Many poems I've written with that name waiting just beyond my lips. -Richard

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/4/2020 12:05:00 PM

Wow Richard. This had me reading it a few times over again. Well done and thought provoking. I hope all is well. :)

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/9/2020 1:47:00 PM

Hello and happy Sunday Heidi. Thanks for the comment. I hope the midsummer days are being kind to you. Could never guess at where they would find us. -Richard