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Poetic Form: Ghazal
Inspired: 2024 February03

 

*1st Place*
Ghazal Form Contest
Contest Judged: 2024 February 05
Sponsored by: Sotto Poet

 

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Love contests in quantities, like numbers, game of chance for romance by the numbers, You and you, pick one or two, left first choose, then right follows through ... awake the numbers, if I was you, don't let romance wait too, go ahead, awaken the dead ... numbers, At last, the dead have passed, now let's see who? Romance counts true ... encounter the numbers, You have the Lucky Two, which means you lose, You've one, as you've begun ... 'twas the numbers, So stop your frets, but guess what's next; Round Two, Where you and you will not choose the numbers, But I will choose which one of you will step ... aside. Let the other get the numbers, with the roll of a dice, the one who stepped aside, from counted steps of dice numbers, --HOLD, break from sequence, noted facial change, bears a consequence, shortchange the numbers, FOCUS, understand passion, hence, begin again, --dice rolled--, start steps to those numbers, Distance makes the difference, the farther you are from me, the better ... you, numbers, Your turn, the dice have been rolled, go, distant yourself. The dice will roll seven numbers, This was the first, therefore, six more to go. The Desert Tribesman's way's ... the numbers, We live by this code of honor. Methods, in and of itself, seems nothing ... numbers seems nothing. The deserts way, the Desert People ... Ancestral ties are... the numbers.

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Date: 2/7/2024 12:32:00 PM
Congratulations for your top win! Well done :)
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Hilo Poet
Date: 2/7/2024 12:40:00 PM
Thanks, Heidi, much appreciated, Aloha, William
Date: 2/6/2024 11:05:00 AM
Auwe, William! This is maika'i loa! Mahalo, hoaaloha, for this romp through the many meanings, scenarios and intricacies of numbers! Ho'omaika'i!
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Hilo Poet
Date: 2/6/2024 2:09:00 PM
Aloha, braddah Sam. Maika'i nou, I'll send you soupmail when things get worked out here with me, until then, a hui hou, and mahalo, William
Date: 2/6/2024 9:52:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Hilo, blessings
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Hilo Poet
Date: 2/6/2024 10:17:00 AM
Truly kind of you, Paghunda. Blessings to you as well my friend. Aloha, William
Date: 2/3/2024 3:59:00 PM
I loved the repeated use of numbers--perfect for using with the 'chance' concept as it relates to romance. I especially liked 'ancestral ties are...the numbers." I found that both deep and thought provoking. Nicely done; have a great evening, Sara
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Hilo Poet
Date: 2/3/2024 7:09:00 PM
Sara, your descriptive breakdowns are reassuring of a message well-interpreted. I thank you for being a constant blessing as a voice for efforts is being highlighted by a true friend. Aloha, William
Date: 2/3/2024 10:15:00 AM
Hilo, your poem is a captivating exploration of love and chance. The imagery and rhythm draw me in, and the repeated motif of numbers adds depth to the narrative. Your unique perspective on romance and fate is thought-provoking. Very well written. -Blessings, Danie
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Date: 2/3/2024 6:58:00 PM
Aloha, Daniel, and to your intro commentary, a welcoming eye-opener--to say the least. An admirable quality of a studious nature toward in-depth awareness, my friend. Mahalo, William

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