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Traditional Cinquain Two

Jumping
quickly forward
Falling backwards slowly
Ungraciously I am losing
control

adventurecinquain

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Nette Onclaud

May 16, 2013 at 5:24 PM

ohh, a well-crafted cinquain with the flow that goes forward and backward...enjoyed the sense of uneasiness; wonderful!..:) huggs

Richard Lamoureux

May 16, 2013 at 5:30 PM

Thanks Nette, only my second one so it's fitting that there is some uneasiness. I am pleased you enjoyed it.

Kim Van Breda

May 16, 2013 at 11:40 AM

Thanks Richard-- same as your other one... great write and confirmation of a tradition Cinquain. I think I will try this sometime... Haiku can get... ummm .. difficult and yet a quick fix if that makes sense... will give them a break for awhile.

Richard Lamoureux

May 16, 2013 at 5:32 PM

My Achilles heal is the dreaded Haiku. It feels so unnatural to me which is funny when you consider the main topic deals with nature.

Eileen Manassian

May 16, 2013 at 11:26 AM

Richard, I hope that this is just a practice in expressing your poetic talent and not reflective of life at the moment. I hope that God makes your paths straight. Said a prayer for you today.

Richard Lamoureux

May 16, 2013 at 5:34 PM

Yes, just practice. All is well in the world. Thanks for being concearned, that is very sweet. Hugs Rick