Traditional Cinquain Two

Jumping quickly forward Falling backwards slowly Ungraciously I am losing control

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Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/16/2013 5:24:00 PM

ohh, a well-crafted cinquain with the flow that goes forward and backward...enjoyed the sense of uneasiness; wonderful!..:) huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2013 5:30:00 PM

Thanks Nette, only my second one so it's fitting that there is some uneasiness. I am pleased you enjoyed it.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/16/2013 11:40:00 AM

Thanks Richard-- same as your other one... great write and confirmation of a tradition Cinquain. I think I will try this sometime... Haiku can get... ummm .. difficult and yet a quick fix if that makes sense... will give them a break for awhile.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2013 5:32:00 PM

My Achilles heal is the dreaded Haiku. It feels so unnatural to me which is funny when you consider the main topic deals with nature.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/16/2013 11:26:00 AM

Richard, I hope that this is just a practice in expressing your poetic talent and not reflective of life at the moment. I hope that God makes your paths straight. Said a prayer for you today.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2013 5:34:00 PM

Yes, just practice. All is well in the world. Thanks for being concearned, that is very sweet. Hugs Rick

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 5/16/2013 9:49:00 AM

Great cinquain :D just stopped by to say hello and wishing you a wonderful day :D hug, yanny

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2013 5:28:00 PM

Thanks Yanny, so nice to have your visit.