Richard Lamoureux Poet Cinquain

Traditional Cinquain Three

Screaming
towards heaven
while angels sit on clouds
is it possible they are not
hearing


I have not written one of these in a while 
was motivated by Drakes first cinquain.
Great first attempt at this form Drake.

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Sue-Ellen Newman August 2, 2013 at 3:18 AM Well done true to form great write, loved the imagery, angels sitting on clouds, perfect, thanks for haring, blessings sueellen

Monterey Sirak July 31, 2013 at 6:25 AM Short and very powerful. Loved it Richard Lamoureux July 31, 2013 at 6:38 AM Thanks again Monterey, you are up early as well. I got up early to work on my Knight Rises poem. Finally finished making changes to it.

Eileen Manassian July 30, 2013 at 7:11 AM :) They hear...they sometimes need us to become stronger.... Lovely...as all your work is! BTW...in your notes...have not written....(present perfect tense) ;) Emphasis on the PERFECT! ;) Like your poem................ Eileen Manassian July 30, 2013 at 8:03 AM HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!! LOVE your MAMA! She is a sweetie pie! SO..I got to be in her role for a day! WOW! ;) Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2013 at 7:51 AM Ha ha, my mom told me yesterday and I was just coming to make the correction. Thanks for pointing it out.

Jack Jordan July 29, 2013 at 8:51 PM No matter the form, this is a beautiful poem... jack Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2013 at 6:31 AM Thanks Jack

Poet Tacito July 29, 2013 at 11:52 AM =D Well, look at this! You're very kind, Richard, thank you! This was a strong piece. Challenging & questioning the one thing that should be certain...angels. Excellently done! Richard Lamoureux July 29, 2013 at 5:51 PM Thanks Drake, glad you like it.

Colleen Bono July 29, 2013 at 11:13 AM My angels are on vacation right now. Love Colleen Richard Lamoureux July 29, 2013 at 11:23 AM I hope they come back quickly.

Manel Gunatillake July 29, 2013 at 10:58 AM Good Morning Richard . This is lovely. You are good in any form So sad! The Angels seem to be preoccupied sometimes Richard Lamoureux July 29, 2013 at 11:06 AM Thanks Manel