Town Children

TOWN CHILDREN

Deep in the midst of dawning view 
Children awaken to a fresh morning dew

Eyes heavy with sleeping
Still in their beds
While the chattering of neighbors
Irritate their heads

Deep in the midst of eyes awakening
Telephones ringing becomes disabling

Minds trying to engage
Amid the noise
Another day in a town
That’s lacking poise

Deep in the midst of some town avenues
Children, out the door, meet mufflers spew

Visions of soon visiting  
The country side
Propel their young legs
To dream in stride

While…Deep in the midst of some country side lanes
Children, not so different, find faults and complain

Minds trying to engage
Still in their beds
While visions of town life
Dance in their heads

Deep in the midst of a dawning view
Children awaken to a fresh morning dew

Another day in the country
That’s lacking poise
So tired of the country life
Needing noise

© 10/02/2019
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Lander Avatar
May 24, 2025 at 7:56 AM
i just came across this love the feel of it profound
Johnson Avatar
November 17, 2019 at 7:39 AM
Wow, good take on the grass is always greener theme Debra. I would love to live in a place like New York City, but, let's get real huh? :) lol <3 :)
Peterson Avatar
October 19, 2019 at 6:52 PM
What an engaging, imaginative write. Well constructed rhymes cloaking a genuine message, offered up with consummate skill. Very much enjoyed.
Onclaud Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 5:38 PM
ohh, this is a remarkable write capturing the unnecessary desire for urban life...what we don't have, we want to get, debra... thanks for your positive feedback... huggs
Lamoureux Avatar
October 14, 2019 at 9:58 AM
I like your take on the contest. I too wrote one for the contest.
Warrior Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 9:09 PM
Lovely rhyme my friend...great entry if not too late Debra...^WW^ :o)
One Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 1:07 PM
Your poems create great imagery... Just a tip Debra, when entering contests, names are not allowed. So, if you have entered this one, you may have to remove your name or it may not get placed..
Squyres Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 3:49 PM
Thank you... I removed it but it had already been read. Probably already disqualified if it was not allowed. I did not see No names listed under the contest though.. only date it. OH well... what will be will be.
Andresen Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 1:28 PM
- A beautifully described poem, Debra :) - Good luck and happy weekend :) - // Anne-Lise :)"
Dutta Avatar
October 4, 2019 at 2:02 AM
Nice Composition. All the best.
Mcintosh Avatar
October 3, 2019 at 10:29 AM
A wonderful poem for the Town Children contest. I like it so much. Bless you always
Green Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 3:59 PM
Nice, I like where this went. It doesn't matter what side of the tracks they live on, they all find something to complain about. Nicely done Debra.
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