Victor Buhagiar Poet Rhyme

Towards the Pond

 
Birds flew among the old oak trees
Savoring melody in the breeze.

Last night, it rained hard and the air was cleared.
Shining vivid leaves glistened,
Few fell, colorful lawn.

A small sweet deer ambled downwards the winding path.
Towards a small clear pond it ambled in great awe
My whole being at least a consolation hath,
Seeing it have a bath and play and then it saw

among floating leaves
tadpoles in shimmering waves . . .
beware the ducklings



17 September 2020
For Constance La France's "Writing challenge, nature - four in one" contest 


Placed 3

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Sara Kendrick August 9, 2022 at 3:51 PM A late congratulatory comment just for you. Way to go. You did good. Sara

Angela Crabtree October 1, 2020 at 3:55 PM Congratulations, Victor on your poem! It's wonderful to see animals play. I bet it's beautiful where you live. I like the way you explained the leaves bringing color to your lawn. This is an excellent poem! Peace, Angie

Constance La France September 29, 2020 at 1:36 PM Victor, congratulations on your win in my Nature Four in One Challenge with this wonderful write, a FAV for me _Constance

Paula Goldsmith September 22, 2020 at 1:51 PM Congratulations on your win. A beautiful poem. I am walking your winding paths. Enjoy your win.....................

Jan Allison September 21, 2020 at 3:21 PM Dropping back to say many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen September 21, 2020 at 6:40 AM - Congratulations on your win, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jennifer Proxenos September 19, 2020 at 12:27 PM Such a calming write, so tranquil, so absorbing, excellent write Victor my friend. Well penned. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Eve Roper September 18, 2020 at 5:55 PM Why life is so calming to watch. Are used to go up on the hill with my husband to watch the wildlife and it was so beautiful excellent right

Eve Roper September 18, 2020 at 5:55 PM Why life is so calming to watch. Are used to go up on the hill with my husband to watch the wildlife and it was so beautiful excellent right

Evelyn Judy Buehler September 17, 2020 at 10:56 PM This poem caused me to breathe a sigh, it is so perfect and lovely. :)

Judy Ball September 17, 2020 at 5:01 PM This is beautiful. I could see the deer walking down the forest path toward a beautiful pond for a drink and to play in the water. Great stuff. Reminded me of a film clip I saw online once of a deer in the forest. It didn't know anyone was around filming it and it kept running through a puddle just to make it splash. A sweet forest creature at play. Loved it. God Bless, JB

Nette Onclaud September 17, 2020 at 3:07 PM beautiful details highlighting your stroll through nature's wonder, victor... huggs

Tom Cunningham September 17, 2020 at 6:30 AM Stunning imagery Victor, that you compose so well. Good luck Tom

Vijay Pandit September 17, 2020 at 5:57 AM Enjoyed the sound of this four in one beauty you wrote, Victor. Absolutely delightful imagery!

John Lawless September 17, 2020 at 5:52 AM a very interesting walk in the woods Victor. That final verse sums up nature.

Kim Rodrigues September 17, 2020 at 4:45 AM Love especially the final verse!

Maris Warrior Tuazon September 17, 2020 at 4:09 AM I love the imagery here Victor.

Jan Allison September 17, 2020 at 2:29 AM absolutely charming Victor i especially loved the imagery of the deer:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen September 17, 2020 at 2:07 AM - Beautiful, Victor ... you have posted the winning poem :) - Have a lovely day ... glad you are back :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)