Tour Night Out

we  came to town
to get around
we were up and down
listen to the sound
of the streets
vendor music and beat
it was a treat and we eat
no doudt under b'way light
TOURS NIGHT OUT
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Hankins Avatar
December 26, 2021 at 3:43 PM
The repetitious phrases simply didn't work for me. It seems like you are trying to get lines to cover the page. The idea has merit, but it needs a lot of work.
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