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I did this in the 5 7 7 syllable count as it allowed me a bit more input

on the second reflective focus..' this write is just based on what I have found to be true with life

I think its rather sad when people get used to firing of negative words; or an aura.' If in fact if it cost something

to do it maybe they'd consider , rather than being spendthrifts as it were..' you often  hear

the phrase kindness costs nothing, yet I think that kindness/patience costs something more  that's the

reason some are skinflints in this area, so the write is not pointed at anyone in particular

'just an observation' based on the 'saying kindness costs nothing'

 

 

winter or summer, Nastiness times; costs, one zilch.' Millstone eternal you! Joe Maverick.

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Date: 5/6/2017 8:01:00 AM
I see you put a lot of thought into crafting this one.
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Joe Maverick
Date: 5/6/2017 5:00:00 PM
Hello Richard, good to see your visit.' Hope all going well with you..
Date: 1/13/2016 5:47:00 AM
Man this is a deep convoluted write. Seeing your question to Nathan, I'd say that yes Senyru is the best form to express the conflicting sides of humanity. After all Senyru is meant to be a dark comedy about humanities less desirable aspects. So kudos to you for an appropriate poetic form, for your intended statement. Oh and thanks for you visit today.
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Date: 11/14/2015 8:24:00 AM
After reading the first senryu that had caught my attention, I couldn't stop myself to click this one for another read. And I love this a lot as well. Another awesome verse you've crafted by your creative words leaving a reader great thoughts to ponder on. So enjoyed my dear friend, Joe and thanks a lot for sharing. God bless you! Many hugs from me! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 11/13/2015 5:35:00 PM
I love the last line. Makes me feel at the very end, we all get something for something. Awesome. Sk
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Date: 11/13/2015 10:31:00 AM
um is it a double negative to say that nothing cost nothing
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Joe Maverick
Date: 11/13/2015 1:49:00 PM
Maybe the senryu is not compatible with this aim, what do you think.?
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Date: 11/13/2015 1:47:00 PM
Hi Nathan, thanks for the comment what I am exploring within the Senryu format is the contradiction of the saying kindness costs nothing, when on considering 'perhaps' people speak or act negatively is I guess a better word..' because initially they perceive 'it costs nothing' so how unconscious are lies 'or self deceit even' and how does it exist in the English language,