Michael J. Falotico Poet Senryu

Tossing and Turning

tossing and turning
                                             the night seems endless and dark
                                                  light hides behind dreams


Brians Triplet contest
12/5/11

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Andrea Dietrich December 14, 2011 at 8:17 PM Just finally going thru this older contest winners' circle and saw you scored high. A very well deserved win. Congratulations.

Kim Merryman December 8, 2011 at 3:09 PM Congrats on your win, Michael! Kim

David Williams December 7, 2011 at 11:56 AM Michael congrats on your win,love the last line..David

Cory Long December 7, 2011 at 11:45 AM congrats on your win my friend cory

Carol Sunshine Brown December 7, 2011 at 11:30 AM Congratulations on your win in Brian's "Triplet" contest Michael. Love, Carol

Kash Poet December 7, 2011 at 9:53 AM Wonderful Senryu here Michael.Congratulations on your win.

Poet Destroyer A December 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM Michael, that was me last night,, tossing and turning.. don't know why... but, the light has to come on.. A very good entry for Brian's contest,~ENJOYED.. thank you for sharing your wonderful senryu ;-) Have yourself a very lovely day, always,..p.d.

Dinda Minardi December 6, 2011 at 8:46 AM This is awesome! I couldn't agree more with the title and your last line, Michael. Greatly written :)

Broken Butterfly December 6, 2011 at 5:01 AM I think your turn in this Senryu is great. Dead stop and think. I love it.

Andrea Dietrich December 5, 2011 at 9:40 PM wow,that last line really delivers, Michael. Keep putting out great senryu like this!

Wilma Neels December 5, 2011 at 9:19 PM So I need to get the dream part right?? Hehe, enjoyed this gem!! All the best for Brian's contest MJF ;-) love W

Tracy Edwards December 5, 2011 at 8:38 PM Sleepless nights suck ive had a few lately myself :) Nice write x

Cyndi Macmillan December 5, 2011 at 8:32 PM Hi Michael! The last line is my favourite-- a great image! Hope this soars sky high in the contest. Thank you for all your kind comments and support on my own efforts. You're a gent! Cheers from Cyndi

M.I.A . December 5, 2011 at 7:47 PM so well put.. good luck on the contest Michael and thanks for stopping by

Cory Long December 5, 2011 at 4:28 PM nicely done.. good luck in the contest. cory

Elizabeth Wesley December 5, 2011 at 4:21 PM I get those nights sometimes too Michael, you describe the agony so well!

Dawn Mclaughlin December 5, 2011 at 3:57 PM Nice Ink Michael x Thank you for your Comment on my Poem :) Dawn x

Russell Sivey December 5, 2011 at 3:38 PM Great write you have written here! I like how you separated the darkness from the light...the battle of reaching the dream world is ever demanding! Awesome Work!!

Juli- Michelle December 5, 2011 at 3:24 PM I know just how you feel :) =Juli-Michelle=