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Too Excited

My swimmers on, to the beach I ran, Across the hot, white, squirming sand, The first wave faced knocked me rotten, My dad had told me but I'd forgotten, Jump the waves son if you can.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 5/11/2015 8:14:00 AM
Sweet expressions from wonderful lines which are so liberal to disallow the message stay hidden. I love this poem and it is definitely a 7
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john williams
Date: 5/13/2015 5:46:00 AM
Thank you so much Funom for your wonderful comment, it is much appreciated....kind regards.....John
Date: 5/9/2015 9:24:00 AM
So vivid I feel as if I were videoing your experience.. PS: I wish I were at the beach right now!
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john williams
Date: 5/11/2015 2:59:00 AM
Thank you so much Lyric Man for your wonderful comment. I hope you get to the beach soon......kind regards.....John
Date: 5/9/2015 7:16:00 AM
Nice fun with waves! Good evening John. :) Kim
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john williams
Date: 5/9/2015 8:02:00 AM
Good evening Kim. Yes, a lovely day at the beach for a young boy. Thanks for stopping by Kim......kind regards....John