Too Drunk, Not Drunk

When your with people you think you can trust

and you get a bit to drunk

and you thought you could trust him

after all your mom loved him

 

and you go to bed just afer 2

and mom went to bed just after 1

and he came in room just after 4

so you ask him for a pill...

He gets you the pill and you take it for your head

still drunk

     still drunk

and then you lay back down

still drunk

and then his hand snakes out

still drunk

and then his lips meet yours

still drunk

smell the beer

still drunk

and his hand slides under your gown

still drunk

and you just cant say no

too drunk

    too drunk

and his touches, soft but rough

not drunk

    not drunk

and he plays with your untuoched parts

not drunk

    not drunk

and you try to turn but you cant

not drunk

    not drunk

and you finnaly win and turn

not drunk

    not drunk

and he silently walks away

not drunk

    not drunk

and whispers to the dark room

are you drunk

    are you drunk

        are you drunk 

and you wish you could say that you were

so drunk

     so drunk

so you can turn, fall asleep, and forget

not drunk

    not drunk

and you know in deep and dark thoughts...

your not drunk

      your not drunk

             your not drunk
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 12/30/2011 7:15:00 AM
Welcome to Poetry Soup. This is a great site where you can post your poems, receive encouragement and be inspired by other poets. Be sure to read and comment on the other writer's work and they will do the same for you. Wishing you the best, Kim
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Date: 12/28/2011 9:50:00 PM
Wow-this is quite good. Diffferent indeed!
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Date: 12/28/2011 3:59:00 PM
It should be you're. Nice use of repetition here. Interesting structure as well.
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Veronica Powell
Date: 12/28/2011 5:22:00 PM
oh srry about bad spelling im not to good at it... if you knwo of any good editors that would be amazing
Date: 12/28/2011 3:51:00 PM
Very Good!
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Veronica Powell
Date: 12/28/2011 5:22:00 PM
thanks!!
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