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Tokens That Last

red roses are fine to give me sweet valentine but this year I want tokens that lasts a lifetime honesty, trust, commitment ~*~ 1/25/13

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Sean L Sanders

Date: 1/31/2013 5:54:00 AM

I love the poem but hate the last part how about just say (take my hand) after lifetime put take my hand or something that refers to holding on. You should end this poem not let it linger. But it's better then alot of poems I wrote so excellent poem poet. I'm litsenning

Audrey Haick
Date: 1/31/2013 11:56:00 AM

Tanka is a form of poetry which only allows 5 lines with specific number of syllables, Sean. Thanks for reading it and your kind advice.

Sean L Sanders
Date: 1/31/2013 5:56:00 AM

But as I said better then me and I'm glad you won. You are a excellent poet.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/30/2013 10:38:00 PM

a fantastic message in your little poem!! And what you said about Berlin WAll, yes, that is something Reagan said that I really admire him for.

Carrie Richards

Date: 1/27/2013 3:35:00 PM

I agree........those are the true things that matter!! Love this positive message. :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/27/2013 5:57:00 AM

Hey this is good, a life's commitment why not,,,brilliant poetry...

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 1/27/2013 12:13:00 AM

Well said. Congrats!! Jag

Len Gasun

Date: 1/26/2013 11:17:00 PM

Congratulations for a very creative and lovely Valentines Poem and awesome win my dear friend, Annalise! Thanks for sharing it, too! love/hugs, Leonora

Toquyen Harrell

Date: 1/26/2013 10:34:00 PM

Yes, congratulations, Annalise! Great poem. Love ya, Toquyen

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/26/2013 10:20:00 PM

Sure can't diagree with that. Congratulations on your win Annalise!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/26/2013 4:51:00 PM

Annalise... congratulations in Suzette's sweet sweet " VALENTINE" contest. Always & forever * LINDA

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/26/2013 4:48:00 PM

Great things to ask of someone for Valentines or anytime.Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for stopping by,,Sara

David Williams

Date: 1/26/2013 4:03:00 PM

Annalise that's not a lot to ask for!..david

Jack Horne

Date: 1/26/2013 2:35:00 PM

yes, such truth here, Annalise- great write. congrats on your wins, my friend

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/26/2013 10:44:00 AM

Congrad's on your win in this contest, it wasn't an easy challenge! Light & Love

Joseph May

Date: 1/26/2013 6:44:00 AM

congrats on a fine win Annalise

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/25/2013 9:41:00 PM

Hello Annalise, a very beautiful poem. I think I want the best this valentine's day... Commitment sounds nice right about now... we have trust and some honesty. Well, I need to do better on my part... LOL..okay, enough about me.. glad i stopped by to say hi... a good and loving tanka... always~ LINDA