Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Poet Free verse

Today Is Sublime

Today is sublime…
Tearing at the flesh of yesterday,
falling, asynchronous, in the hour of ruin.
Screams dissolve into crimson flow;
mechanical men guard in smoky rows;
demons tempt with savory sins
as frozen smiles reflect from the hell
within the tides of murky waters.

My eyes burn. My throat swells.  
My spirit’s scarred from restraint…

Today is sublime…
Sucking at the marrow of the absolved,
sinking, prisoners smell burnt flesh
and quiver with fright, 
choking on the sinew and stench.
Screams sear in crimson rooms,
seducing the rabid dogs
from the depths of  dank tombs.

My eyes burn. My throat swells.  
My spirit’s scarred from restraint…

Today is sublime…
In the misty garden, we slither…let’s celebrate.


**Heavy Metal Music

By Rhonda Johnson-Saunders, 10/8/13
for Nette Onclaud’s Groove It! Contest

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Skat A October 30, 2013 at 12:25 PM Rhonda, enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~

Tim Ryerson October 28, 2013 at 4:51 PM Rhonda my friend!...I must admit that I always pictured you as a proper, settled homebody (which I'm sure you are) But look at you!! You NAILED it here! I can't pick out a favorite line and yes indeed....let's celebrate! - Tim Tim Ryerson October 28, 2013 at 5:00 PM I consider Led Zeppelin to be the 'founding fathers' of heavy metal...I grew up listening to R&B and the blues and basically, they sang the blues...

Poet Destroyer A October 28, 2013 at 11:53 AM Hello Rhonda, ... congratulations on your win...LINDA

Carrie Richards October 28, 2013 at 10:09 AM I love the line "my spirit's scarred from restraint"......yes........describes the artist and the music so well !! Great poem, Rhonda!!

Dr.Ram Mehta October 28, 2013 at 7:49 AM Congrats on the win in the contest, Rhonda

Sandra Adams October 27, 2013 at 8:21 PM excellent poem for the contest Rhonda... congrats on your win :)

Charmaine Chircop October 11, 2013 at 6:56 AM Hello dear you definitely grooved it and Im sure our sweet nettie would love this..Have a lovely day and tnks for stopping by.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri October 10, 2013 at 8:32 AM And yor poem itself is sublime, enjoyd d cryptic slithering, but lets pray we dönt fall prey to d devil. Kudos. Pls review my latest poem too.

Robert Johnson October 10, 2013 at 8:28 AM Every reminder that we must face of mans inhumanity that we retrace. Leaves us with ashes that tint the new day. As we have no choice but to get on our way. Your poem reminds me of the holocost. I'm guessing maybe that was on your mind. Peace. :)

Len Gasun October 10, 2013 at 8:11 AM Hello my dear friend Rhonda! I'm so so happy to see you back and have you sharing with us your excellent writes again. Biggest hugs to u. Your poem is beyond amazing. You really did it extraordinarily well. Kudos to you my dear friend. I so love it and it's a grand winner for me. Thank you so much for sharing! Have a great day! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora

Debbie Guzzi October 10, 2013 at 6:39 AM Hi there, Nesting was NOT a correct Ghazal, yes it is hard ... I guess the three most important things are 1. the repeating word or phrase [at the end of BOTH lines 1 & 2 then 4,6,8,10 etc] 2. that the word before that rhymes in both 1&2, then 4,6,8,10 etc - its monorhyme-cat / bat / hat / that 3. That you TRY to have each couplet read like a proverb, a single unit, a stand alone poem .. hope that helps hon L & L Debbie Guzzi October 10, 2013 at 6:40 AM PS GREAT entry!! I'd love to add you to the get serious group? Let's get YOU published too!

Andrea Dietrich October 10, 2013 at 1:25 AM and it should REALLY wow Nette.

Andrea Dietrich October 10, 2013 at 1:25 AM OH MY GOODNESS> I could not figure out what was going on and then saw Heavy Metal and I got it. haha. And OMG, I am looking at Carrie's comment below mine right now. She said almost the exact thing I just said!!! It wowed me too.

Carrie Richards October 9, 2013 at 8:27 PM Oh wow......this is perfect ~~ When I first started to read, I thought this was so different from your happy usual self......then I saw for the Heavy Metal..and it wowed me !! A great piece!!

Sara Kendrick October 9, 2013 at 6:14 PM Interesting contest entry..Very expressive indeed..Thanks for the visit by my page with congrats..Sara

Russell Sivey October 9, 2013 at 4:45 PM WOW!! The emotion and fearsome feelings is thrashing all throughout this write! You have written an incredible and fascinating poem here Rhonda! A definitely different type of poem from you my friend! What a tremendous piece, Great Work!!

Dan Kearley October 9, 2013 at 1:41 PM Wow! That was really something! I never imagined such darkness to come from you? Very well written... And you hit the nail on the head with your comment on my song. I was trying to combine a Steve Miller, Skynard sound. Good call! :o) And thank you always for stopping by. I've been kinda busy lately... No time for reading, just writing when I can. But I'll be around soon...

Poet Tacito October 9, 2013 at 12:57 PM Ridiculously awesome! There was a genuine thrash to these lines. Fiercely written. I need to listen to some head-banging music now. THANKS! =)