To You, Woman

If there is some mystic force
behind the cosmos,
be it God or Gods or Fates,
we certainly were
created in their image, 
as they seem to be right
at the same 50/50 rate as ourselves.

They got it wrong with rape
They got it wrong with war
They got it wrong with politics
They got it wrong with the music industry
They got it wrong with pimps
They got it wrong with critics
They got it wrong with logging
They got it wrong with the infrastructure of society
They got it wrong with artists who don't have it anymore

They got it right with quiet afternoons
watching the rain and the snow
They got it right with the joyous look
in a puppy's eyes
They got it right with Mozart and Beethoven
They got it right with artists who leave at their peak
They got it right with the female form

They got it right
and they got it wrong
with love

Most of all,
they got it right
with the way your hair
folds over your face when you lay down
like a silk veil.
There resides a great treasure
that is revealed every time I lift it.
The one ingenious masterpiece
that even makes me
want to love me
so I can watch it
forever;
makes all the wrongs
more bearable.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 6/21/2010 10:40:00 AM
This is excellent! The piece flows very well and is quite imaginative. The storyline is inspiring and unique. I like the juxtapositioning between what came out right, and what turned out wrong on the other side. Great job! Joseph
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Date: 6/19/2010 5:33:00 PM
wow, this write captured pure beauty, loved it and such gracious ending..P.D.
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Date: 6/19/2010 3:36:00 PM
Like your write ... sarah x
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