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To Love Cherish and Batter

He solemnly swears, In sickness and in health; He pledges to her, Love and wealth. Promises were broken and shattered love, Jealousy that out ways reason; Doubts, corruptness, and failures, Min in tatters and outdone. She wears sunglasses sometimes, Not to protect her eyes from the sun; Long sleeves to cover her arms, A punch if she looks at anyone. He loves her dearly, He owns her or so he thinks; Mistrusts every step she takes, His mouth speaks his words that stink. For sickness and in health they pledged with rings; He shows his hate when her neck he wrings.

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Martin Braun

Date: 11/27/2018 5:42:00 PM

I think you got mentally hung up at "Promises were broken and shattered love," and I don't know that "min" is in "Min in tatters and outdone." I like the topic, and I think there is a very deep well of emotions and ideas which can be explored. If you were abused and witnessed abuse I believe you need to include those dark spaces and not hold back. That's just my thoughts and I want to thank you for taking on such an emotional subject.