To Fly

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Edward Ibeh's 'Pick-A-Title, Vol 51' Contest...submitted 10 May 2025

Upon this dappled hill I stand Before these priceless scenes so grand That no one ever saw Beneath... upon a ridge so high A bright display, the cerise sky Rooted alone in awe. No fearless bird did ever reach No mountain high could ever breach I think thus as i sigh All so perfect where they are The fragrant wind, the distant star In peace so complete...I fly ! Then wisps of dew, the tangy breeze The rising brooks and soaring trees Such wonders that I see--- This misty hill , the sun has shown- Gems of earth that I haven't known Ascending into heaven , free ! Third Place

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/18/2025 10:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "To Fly" write. Great Last line... Have a blessed day with your win................

CayCay Jennings

Date: 5/9/2025 9:56:00 PM

This is absolutely gorgeous, a poem of poems - its rhythm, flow, rhyme and beat all wrapped me in poetry splendor! A read so sweet ... CayCay

Crystol Woods

Date: 5/9/2025 7:05:00 AM

Such a beautifully flowing poem... a scene imagined and related in language so pretty! I just did a study on the gem stones that will be in the heavenly temple... it's amazing! Xo

James Marshall Goff

Date: 5/9/2025 3:31:00 AM

A delightful dreamlike oracle Char!

Paige Hind

Date: 5/8/2025 5:10:00 PM

Gorgeous, Nette. The rhyme was so perfect- I felt the awe with you. Gorgeous.

Silent One

Date: 5/8/2025 6:28:00 AM

Lovely word play here, Nette... I like how your poem is a celebration of nature's quiet majesty, spoken from a place of deep solitude and wonder. I can imagine standing “upon this dappled hill,” overwhelmed by a view that feels untouched and uniquely theirs—“that no one ever saw.” Your language evokes a sense of discovery, as if the natural world is revealing hidden beauty only to those still and open enough to perceive it.