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To Be Or Not To Be

I looked like plump Mrs. Potato Head before
Then I started dancing around the room
Then I danced around the large ballroom floor
Discarding my broom, I began to bloom

Then I started dancing around the room
My youthful figure began a sweet bud
Discarding my broom, I began to bloom
No longer was I a rustic fat spud

My youthful figure began a sweet bud
Then I danced around the large ballroom floor
No longer was I a rustic fat spud
I looked like plump Mrs. Potato Head before  

Date: 07/27/2021
Photo: #3
I used rhyme zone
Contest: Pantoum Rhyme 1
Sponsor: Eve Roper

1I looked like plump Mrs. Potato Head before 10
2Then I started dancing around the room 10
3Then I danced around the large ballroom floor 10
4Discarding my broom, I began to bloom 10
5
6Then I started dancing around the room 10
7My youthful figure began a sweet bud 10
8Discarding my broom, I began to bloom 10
9No longer was I a rustic fat spud 10
10
11My youthful figure began a sweet bud 10
12Then I danced around the large ballroom floor 10
13No longer was I a rustic fat spud 10
14I looked like plump Mrs. Potato Head before 10

I did check this on syllable counter and this is what I got so that is the reason I did not correct it.

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Date: 8/17/2021 11:11:00 AM
Sara, wonderfully done! Had to smile as your "youthful" figure returned through dancing - true happy feet! What a great, happy, way to stay in shape - a great solution! Congrats and kudos. Keep dancing! Blessings.
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Date: 8/16/2021 9:28:00 AM
Great Work. Congratulations on your win!
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/16/2021 12:56:00 PM
Alex, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Sara
Date: 8/14/2021 8:18:00 PM
Came to this beauty, Sara, I loved it when I read it, but it was only suppose to 10 syllable count per line. Hugs Eve
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/16/2021 3:29:00 AM
Eve, Thanks. Sara
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Eve Roper
Date: 8/15/2021 5:36:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/15/2021 5:38:00 AM
Eve, Thanks for dropping by. I suppose you are letting me know that I did not place so thank you. I checked the syllables but I guess I missed something. I can blame it on age or senior moments. Sara
Date: 8/11/2021 10:12:00 AM
This is a hilarious pantoum!
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/11/2021 1:15:00 PM
Caren, I am glad that you enjoyed the humor in this work. Thanks for all the visits to my pages. Sara
Date: 8/5/2021 1:34:00 PM
Our grandson has started as he means to go on. The moment music is turned on he is up dancing or prancing. He is two and a half. If we could all dance our way through life and maybe sing as well? At least poetry keeps our fingers nimble. Take care David in NZ
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/5/2021 3:20:00 PM
David, I do enjoy seeing those little ones enjoy music dancing their own design. They are so precious and the years are so short when they are young. I think feeling the music be it dancing or just moving while seated lifts our spirits to a higher level. Thanks for dropping by. Sara
Date: 7/29/2021 1:51:00 PM
- An entertaining poem ... so well done, Sara :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/30/2021 3:19:00 AM
SS, I am glad you were entertained. I appreciate the time spent here. Sara
Date: 7/28/2021 2:04:00 AM
Great poem, Sara, made me smile. love it.
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/30/2021 3:16:00 AM
Harry, Glad it brought a smile for laughter is the best medicine. Thanks for the visit. Sara
Date: 7/28/2021 1:28:00 AM
You have us all dancing and smiling sara..Delice
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/29/2021 6:46:00 AM
Delice, Ahh!! I hope you can dance for hours. Sara
Date: 7/27/2021 10:32:00 PM
Lol! Sara, What a good interpretation of the photo. Now I feel like dancing. Best wishes in the contest. Have a good evening:-) Alexis
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Date: 7/27/2021 7:50:00 PM
When I saw your picture I was perplexed. Still, you did a great pantoum. Best for a win.
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/29/2021 4:03:00 AM
Victor, I was using one picture from the pictures she said to choose. I thought that I could write one or more about this picture. Thanks for stopping by. Sara
Date: 7/27/2021 2:39:00 PM
LOL…changing someone’s character after many many years…from plump Mrs. Potato Head to small fry! :) chuckle
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/27/2021 3:02:00 PM
Kim, Yes, maybe I could do that if I danced around the ballroom floor with a nice young man who is teaching me to dance. Thanks for your visit. Sara
Date: 7/27/2021 1:27:00 PM
Lol love your interpretation of the picture Sara, good luck in the contest. Tom
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/27/2021 2:57:00 PM
Thank you, Tom. Good luck wishes might help. Sara
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