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To Be Immortal

To be immortal. How would THAT work out? To keep a youthful look forevermore I think would be incredible – no doubt! Would all the chronic pain that I deplore become unfeasible? That would be swell! To outlive history! How would that be? I’d know the follies of mankind so well but probably have no ability to stop the madness! Finally, what of relationships when all of my own kin I would outlive? How could I look for love; watch them die over and over again? I think it’s better to face death one day. The spirit is eternal anyway! An oldie Submitted currently for Anoucheka Gangabissoon's If I Were Immortal Contest

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Date: 5/3/2022 4:44:00 AM
"I think it’s better to face death one day" - Great thought. Congratulations!
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Date: 5/2/2022 8:58:00 PM
"The spirit is eternal" An awesome poem written in one of my favorite poem-forms. Thank you so much for sharing. Big Congrats on your win my dear friend! Blessings! Hugs
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Date: 5/2/2022 6:04:00 PM
Wonderful write and so true. Love it. God bless you and Congrats. Love, Gina
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Date: 5/2/2022 7:09:00 AM
WoW! Andrea, You a have submitted a good entry for the contest. Well done. Congratulations on your winning write. Have a nice day:-) Alexis
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Date: 8/9/2021 5:41:00 PM
Hello Andrea ... another fine sonnet indeed, and as you wrote, I believe to be immortal would hold so much pain - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 7/30/2021 11:18:00 AM
What happens to our soul, i have never asked a priest but think I must, we all use it in our poetry but what happens to it when we die?i Adore this sonnet. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 7/29/2021 10:54:00 PM
Beautiful sonnet dear friend, with philosophical ponderings woven in and your inimitable writing style throughout. Congratulations on your win, going in my faves. Hugs ~ John
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Date: 7/29/2021 4:58:00 AM
Congrats Andrea. I could participate in this Contest as I was confused what to write.
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Date: 7/29/2021 4:37:00 AM
A beautiful write on this subject. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 7/28/2021 6:54:00 AM
Hi Andrea, An interesting poem as it gives us something to ponder. I like the idea of keeping a youthful look but i wouldn't want to live in the same organic body forever. I also believe the spirit is eternal. Nicely written :-) Good luck in the contest. Cheers Anne
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Date: 7/27/2021 3:50:00 AM
She came up with a clever contest. It is a very good question. I guess is one person was immortal than all people would be. In a continuous lifetime one would learn so much or too much about the chosen lifetime mate? I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 7/27/2021 12:43:00 AM
Female infanticide has reduced drastically but still not eliminated. As per net India and China tops the list. Reason poverty, dowry and more....
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Date: 7/26/2021 9:18:00 PM
A very wise quote, Andrea, to be a young for ever and health would be wonderful. But how could anyone see everyone you love , year after year die, and go through the heartache over and over. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/26/2021 3:42:00 PM
Indeed Andrea immortality does pose many problems, you point out some here in this wonderful sonnet, without going too deep into its consequences, perhaps you’ve already achieved immortality through your poems, all the best in contest, cheers David
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Date: 7/26/2021 2:41:00 PM
I'd love to live the Rock 'n' Roll teen years. but the pain of age, and the age of pain, alas i need to forgo. Love the structure of your sonnet Andrea.
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Date: 7/26/2021 12:05:00 PM
Nice one! Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 7/26/2021 9:24:00 AM
Great entry for the contest, Andrea! Your insights are refreshing and clearly stated, as always
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Date: 7/26/2021 6:57:00 AM
Lovely sonnet, Andrea... I loved the tone and flow of the poem... Beautiful ending too... A winner for me...
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Date: 7/26/2021 5:25:00 AM
Yes, I agree. Well said, Andrea. All the best.
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Date: 7/26/2021 5:25:00 AM
Great thoughts in this poem. Well penned!
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Date: 7/26/2021 12:58:00 AM
On the one hand, it sounds tempting but on the other, the drawbacks would be crushing.....Delice
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Date: 7/25/2021 10:12:00 PM
Did you see the film The Age of Adaline? It has much to teach on immortality.
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Date: 7/25/2021 7:25:00 PM
I think you've summed it up quite well, Andrea. Your last two lines are so true...inspired, I'd say. Thanks for this write.
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Date: 7/25/2021 5:11:00 PM
The last two lines sum it up ...a "world without end" would have us begging for an "amen"
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Date: 7/25/2021 3:27:00 PM
Dead right Petal, erm lol
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