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Tim's Been Slipping Some

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I woke to a tune playing in my head that was Tim, my mom timed him to wake me. Tim's a telepathic, implant, module and till I get up, it won't let me be. Tim, drop the music, I'm up already now connect me to my mom... hi, thanks Tim. Don't bother with breakfast... Tim order some and then reserve me a spot at the gym. Hold on mom, dad's trying to talk to Tim Hey dad...I didn't forget our lunch date. Did you hear, there's a new upgraded Tim my birthday’s coming up, it's not too late. To tell you the truth Tim's been slipping some if you can't afford it, split it with mom. (Sonnet) Mar.8, 2018 Science Fiction - Poetry Contest Deborah Guenther Beachboard

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Susan Gentry

Date: 3/24/2018 7:39:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this different but fun dialogue sonnet! Enjoyed it.

Emile Pinet
Date: 3/25/2018 9:09:00 AM

Thanks Susan, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.

Mick Talbot

Date: 3/24/2018 7:26:00 PM

Fun, I just hope it stays s.f.! Congratulations on your 2nd place Emile... Mick

Emile Pinet
Date: 3/25/2018 9:08:00 AM

Thanks Mick, I appreciate the placing and your support my friend, Emile.

Eve Roper

Date: 3/24/2018 5:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your win on this wonderful verse..Emile! Hugs Eve~`*

Emile Pinet
Date: 3/25/2018 9:08:00 AM

Thanks Eve, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.

Deborah Guenther Beachboard

Date: 3/24/2018 3:22:00 PM

This is quintessential science fiction! It draws the reader in and leaves us with the feeling that we need always and better technology, and take it for granted that we will get it in whatever way necessary.

Emile Pinet
Date: 3/24/2018 4:25:00 PM

Thanks so much Deborah, I'm pleased that you liked it and grateful that you took the time to comment my friend, Emile.

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/24/2018 2:57:00 PM

Back with congrats, Emile. Bravo.

Emile Pinet
Date: 3/24/2018 4:23:00 PM

Thanks Line, your comments and support are truly appreciated my friend, Emile.

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/24/2018 9:29:00 AM

A very realistic portend for the future, Emile. I liked the way you foretell it, and congrats on your podium placement in the contest. Sandra :)

Emile Pinet
Date: 3/24/2018 4:23:00 PM

Thanks Sandra, your comments and support are truly appreciated my friend, Emile.

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/8/2018 3:59:00 PM

Hi Emile. I remember in the 70's waking up to Tiny Tim's Tip Toe Through The Tulips... this is different though, right. LOL different century!

Emile Pinet
Date: 3/8/2018 6:04:00 PM

Thanks Line, yeah I remember that...this is how I envision a si-fi future might look like, although Tiny Tim was way out there my friend, Emile.