Chiquitachiamaka Baity Poet Senryu

Time Stood Still

Fear washed over us
                                              Our hearts and time stood still
                                                   Peace had been stolen

                                                     Our souls cried out
                                                    Voices lifted in prayer
                                                     Protect this nation

Chiquita Chiamaka Baity 
 "Remembering 911" contest

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Kingsley Awoh September 22, 2011 at 7:45 AM nice

Andrea Dietrich September 22, 2011 at 12:11 AM this is a really good one, Chiquita. A shame if it didn't make the winners' list!! (oh, I see what must have happened now. the judge wanted traditional syllable count. Otherwise, you'd have had this one in the bag!)

Robert A. Dufresne September 20, 2011 at 9:00 PM Hello Chiquita, this double Senryu says it all . Thank you for your comment

Bl Devnath September 20, 2011 at 11:20 AM Nice, loved it. I appreciate your love to your nation. Great one. Thanks for sharing. bl

Joyce Johnson September 19, 2011 at 9:51 PM Very nicely done and thank you for your comments. Love, Joyce

Terrell Martin September 16, 2011 at 3:50 PM I remember that day as if it were yesterday. Fear and sadness and this poem brings it all back. Thank you Chiquita for saying it so eloquently. It's good to be reading your works again. Take care. Terry

James Peranteau September 16, 2011 at 11:25 AM ...potent words dear poet ! Have a wonderful weekend, much love, james

Poet Destroyer A September 15, 2011 at 4:04 AM Fear washed over us,, a very touching line.. Our souls cried out, with the deepest of sadness.. Voices lifted in prayer,,, great entry for Carolyns contest,..p.d.

Jslambert Mister Roboto September 13, 2011 at 3:21 PM "Fear washed over us Our hearts and time stood still. Peace had been stolen" Three STRONG lines! I like this part a lot. And Yes, I got your Soup Mail. You always put out great lines for us to read. I would like to see you on stage. Please google STACEYANN CHIN!

Russell Sivey September 12, 2011 at 9:40 PM Wow Chiquita, I really like this incredible write! What you have written is purely wonderful! You will do well in the contest!!