Time Stood Still

Fear washed over us
                                              Our hearts and time stood still
                                                   Peace had been stolen

                                                     Our souls cried out
                                                    Voices lifted in prayer
                                                     Protect this nation

Chiquita Chiamaka Baity 
 "Remembering 911" contest

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Kingsley Awoh

Date: 9/22/2011 7:45:00 AM

nice

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/22/2011 12:11:00 AM

this is a really good one, Chiquita. A shame if it didn't make the winners' list!! (oh, I see what must have happened now. the judge wanted traditional syllable count. Otherwise, you'd have had this one in the bag!)

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 9/20/2011 9:00:00 PM

Hello Chiquita, this double Senryu says it all . Thank you for your comment

Bl Devnath

Date: 9/20/2011 11:20:00 AM

Nice, loved it. I appreciate your love to your nation. Great one. Thanks for sharing. bl

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/19/2011 9:51:00 PM

Very nicely done and thank you for your comments. Love, Joyce

Terrell Martin

Date: 9/16/2011 3:50:00 PM

I remember that day as if it were yesterday. Fear and sadness and this poem brings it all back. Thank you Chiquita for saying it so eloquently. It's good to be reading your works again. Take care. Terry

James Peranteau

Date: 9/16/2011 11:25:00 AM

...potent words dear poet ! Have a wonderful weekend, much love, james

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/15/2011 4:04:00 AM

Fear washed over us,, a very touching line.. Our souls cried out, with the deepest of sadness.. Voices lifted in prayer,,, great entry for Carolyns contest,..p.d.

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 9/13/2011 3:21:00 PM

"Fear washed over us Our hearts and time stood still. Peace had been stolen" Three STRONG lines! I like this part a lot. And Yes, I got your Soup Mail. You always put out great lines for us to read. I would like to see you on stage. Please google STACEYANN CHIN!