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Time Passes

Beautiful woman
Twenties or thirties
Schooling or career
Lovers and boyfriends
Best times of her life

Getting older
Gotten smarter
Beauty within
Stability

Golden years
Grandchildren
Gratitude

Tranquil
Wisdom

Time

Copyright © Kim Hilliker | Year Posted 2010

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Doris Culverhouse Date: 11/6/2010 12:32:00 PM Enjoyed reading today...well done! Login to Reply

Sylvia Coulstock Date: 10/25/2010 6:02:00 PM Kimberly. This is absolutely wonderful and so clever.I love everything about it.And you've covered it all, the stages of life,with such simplicity and yet a certain charm.As you say finally when we are older what is left is time.But so precious,to enjoy things, value the real things of life.And to learn things about ourselves when the stresses and strains of working life are gone.As you say in tranquility.Beautiful. thank you Love June Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/22/2010 11:50:00 AM YEs, you showed well the progression. I think this form is best for showing progressions like this. Good one! LUv, andrea Login to Reply

Sue Mason Date: 5/2/2010 12:31:00 PM Excellent use of this form, Kimberly and the progression of our lives ... smile ... thanks so much for your recent comment on my writing and hope you return to the Soup with more of yours!! Been quite awhile since you've posted a new poem ... and I look forward to seeing lots more from you !! Login to Reply

Amy Green Date: 5/1/2010 9:38:00 PM Brilliant~! Login to Reply

Tim Ryerson Date: 2/23/2010 5:29:00 PM Reminds me of two old sayings... 'Youth is wasted on the young' and 'I wish I knew then what I know now'...Very wise and insightful poem, Kimberly, and thanks for your kind comments and support - Tim Login to Reply

Lynette Chachere Date: 2/14/2010 10:21:00 AM Wow, this is true. beautiful write. and thank you for your kind comments. -Always LYnette Login to Reply

Gert W. Knop Date: 2/14/2010 5:26:00 AM Interesting form, Kimberly. Very well written and profound! Keep writing! Gert Login to Reply

Brian Strand Date: 2/13/2010 12:51:00 AM Best wishes in the contest Kimberly.Rgds Brian & thank you for your welcome comments. Login to Reply

Adell Foster Date: 2/13/2010 12:24:00 AM This is a very lovely read in form, imagery, tone and flow. It is indeed a pleasure to have read for you :-) Thank you for your comments on "I've Crossed That Bridge Before" Good Luck in the contest my friend. God Bless, Always, Adell Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 2/12/2010 9:30:00 PM This is a real beauty, Kimberly. i haven't had the courage to try one yet. Enjoyed. Robert Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 2/12/2010 7:29:00 PM Excellent entry for the new contest.. What the Hex.. a great use of words to describe the time span in a woman's life.. good luck Kimberly.. such entertaining words... luv.. Linda-Marie Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/12/2010 4:36:00 PM I think you did geat with this form, Kimberly. Time certainly passes (that was my theme too!) I very much enjoyed this one. Luv, Andrea Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 2/12/2010 2:19:00 PM How well you describe this woman and the beauty that remains in her heart, even in her golden years. Lovely writing, Kimberly! Love, carolyn Login to Reply

Doris Culverhouse Date: 2/12/2010 1:37:00 PM wisely written, enjlyed reading Login to Reply

Susan Palli Date: 2/12/2010 12:47:00 PM A whole life explained in so few words! Excellent Login to Reply

Robyn Blauw Date: 2/12/2010 12:23:00 PM I like this one. If only we could have the wisdom of age and the beauty of the young, then, wow, Im sure we would all make a lot of different choices in our lives. Thanks for your comment. Take care. Login to Reply

Eleanore Bourner Date: 2/12/2010 12:14:00 PM excellent poem, and thank you for your comment. it did feel very relieving :) ------Ell Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 2/12/2010 12:04:00 PM Time passes with it comes wisdom to be the best that we can be. Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara Login to Reply

Date: 2/12/2010 12:02:00 PM Love that journey to tranquility--not enough of that in this fast paced world. You have me smiling with this one. Good luck in the contest. Keep on writing. Karen Login to Reply

Audrey Haick Date: 2/12/2010 10:40:00 AM Wonderful entry for the contest, Kimberly!! I wish you good luck and I'm going to try this! Wish me luck too! LOL! Thank you for your kind comments on my poem. Peace, love, Audrey Login to Reply