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Time Has Slipped Away

I see the dying rays of a setting sun Knowing they are reflections in your eyes I see you put joy and happiness on the run With your slowly-released tempered sighs. I see your struggle to speak words aloud For spoken words, time has slipped away. I see your trembling hands reaching out Grasping your last ounce of courage left. I see your lips have lost their lovely pout Soon you will leave all who love you bereft. I see your struggle to speak words aloud For spoken words, time has slipped away. Some things you feel are important to say I see grimaces of pain furrow your brow If only there was more time, another way I see time to say our last goodbye is now. I see your struggle to speak words aloud For spoken words, time has slipped away. FIRST PLACE WINNER written August 8, 2021 submitted to "Your Favorite August 2021 Poem" Contest sponsored by Constance La France

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Constance La France

Date: 9/2/2021 2:26:00 PM

Milt, beautiful and congratulations on your win in my contest ~ peace and tranquility _ Constance

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 8/31/2021 9:10:00 AM

Powerful! Deep emotions so delicately and eloquently portrayed, congrats Milton!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/31/2021 9:53:00 AM

Thank you so much, Unseeking Seeker. Straight from my heart.

Kim Merryman

Date: 8/11/2021 6:14:00 PM

Milton, this is so well written, filled with emotion. The repeated lines stand out emphasizing the finality of the situation. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/11/2021 6:16:00 PM

Thank you so much for your sweet and thoughtful comment on my poem. I really appreciate it, Kim.

Paris-Maree Boreham

Date: 8/11/2021 12:52:00 AM

very touching poem, Congratulations on your win !

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/11/2021 9:28:00 AM

Thank you very much, Paris-Maree, for your thoughtful comment on my poem.

King Adams

Date: 8/10/2021 4:13:00 AM

Wow, I love this piece

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/10/2021 8:44:00 AM

Thank you so much, King. I am so happy you read and liked my poem. I really appreciate your visit.

Gary Radice

Date: 8/9/2021 10:24:00 PM

From your opening lines to the final lines your poem had me transfixed Milt. The poem is so sad and I'm wondering - as it feels so real - as to whether you are actually describing a personal experience with a loved one through this poem. The repeated couplets are used to great poignant effect. Cheers - Gary

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/10/2021 8:48:00 AM

Thanks for your thoughts, Gary. Yes, the poem was a re-creation of events surrounding the death of my wife. The idea has been in my mind for almost three years, but it took this long before I could bring myself to pen it. I appreciate your kindness, Gary.