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Time and Stardust

Stories are written in scars
Stories are etched in time
Time tells tales
Time full of emotions
Emotions bloom like flowers
Emotions fluttering butterflies
Butterflies in stomachs
Butterflies chasing dreams
Dreams unfolding secrets
Dreams whispered confessions
Confessions of the heart
Confessions under moonlight
Moonlight whispers serenity
Moonlight causes storms
Storms of wild passion
Storms igniting desire
Desire burning like fire
Desire flickering flames
Flames of eternal warmth
Flames lighting the way
Way to endless bliss
Way to shared bliss
Bliss envelops us
Bliss echoes softly
Softly glowing embers
Softly arrives the sunset
Sunset paints the sky
Sunset whispers dreams
Dreams of endless hues
Dreams that dance on clouds
Clouds cradle the sun
Clouds a canvas of warmth
Warmth fading gently
Warmth in the awaken
Awaken the night's embrace
Awaken slowly the sea
Sea of dreams and wishes
Sea dark in the night
Night draped in velvet
Night whispers its secrets
Secrets held by the moon
Secrets sung by the stars
Stars as lanterns glowing
Stars in a starry night
Night unfolding its beauty
Night covered in stardust
Stardust shines on flowers
Stardust is delicate
Delicate
Flowers...

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Sara Kendrick Date: 2/18/2024 4:05:00 AM Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go! Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara K Login to Reply Ariana Pataki Date: 2/18/2024 5:49:00 AM Thanks Sara!

Silent One Date: 2/17/2024 11:22:00 AM Well done on an excellent blitz, especially as it was your first time.. you missed the ... from line 49, other wise it was very good.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. Login to Reply Ariana Pataki Date: 2/18/2024 5:51:00 AM Hi! Thanks for the placement, I'm delighted! Indeed it was my first poem with this structure, but I enjoyed writing it so much! I've been writing more blitzs since I learnt how to write them. Next time I won't forget the ...!

Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/27/2024 12:50:00 PM Wonderful! Login to Reply Ariana Pataki Date: 2/18/2024 5:51:00 AM Thanks Kim!!

Karen Croft Date: 1/26/2024 11:29:00 PM Very well written! Login to Reply Ariana Pataki Date: 1/27/2024 8:30:00 AM I tried my best! Thanks!

John Gondolf Date: 1/25/2024 6:23:00 AM I really enjoyed reading this, Ariana, such beautiful imagery woven throughout. I hope you try this form again, you wrote it so well. John Login to Reply Ariana Pataki Date: 1/25/2024 9:43:00 AM Hi John! It's the first time I try such form, but I'm surely doing this again! Thanks for reading my poem!

Tom Woody Date: 1/25/2024 5:38:00 AM I have to say this is quite good. You're very talented Ariana Login to Reply Tom Woody Date: 1/25/2024 6:32:00 AM None of us here are anywhere near perfection Ariana. Maybe there's no such thing. This was just plain good Ariana Pataki Date: 1/25/2024 6:12:00 AM I tried my best. I know it's not perfect but I tried my best. Thanks Tom, your comments are very kind.

Hiya Sharma Date: 1/24/2024 5:26:00 AM Oh my, this is such a gorgeous Blitz, dear Ariana.. It's indeed an entertaining and a bit tricky form as we've to maintain the flow, but you've really excelled and done a wonderful job here! I absolutely love the imagery that you've woven throughout.. It feels almost whimsical and mystical, in many ways.. "Clouds cradle the sun", "Stories are written in scars", "Stars as lanterns glowing" Oh my, how magical! And i love that ending as well.. Best wishes for the contest :) the title is wonderful! Login to Reply Ariana Pataki Date: 1/24/2024 7:00:00 AM Oh this is a really kind comment! I'm very grateful for such high praise. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. I tried my very best.

Edward Ibeh Date: 1/23/2024 10:27:00 AM Wonderfully written blitz poem, Ariana! GL on the contest. Soupmail. Login to Reply Ariana Pataki Date: 1/23/2024 10:47:00 AM Hi Edward! It was really fun, and challenging. I tried my best! Thanks.