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Oh gosh. I just spent two hours crafting this amazing Blitz for Silent One's contest. I researched a little about the blitz composition, and it's so fun. I adored writing this, my mind was working very hard. Kept me entertained for a good long time. Hope it's good. If I committed any mistakes, please tell me so I can mend it as soon as possible. 

Enjoy reading it!!

Stories are written in scars Stories are etched in time Time tells tales Time full of emotions Emotions bloom like flowers Emotions fluttering butterflies Butterflies in stomachs Butterflies chasing dreams Dreams unfolding secrets Dreams whispered confessions Confessions of the heart Confessions under moonlight Moonlight whispers serenity Moonlight causes storms Storms of wild passion Storms igniting desire Desire burning like fire Desire flickering flames Flames of eternal warmth Flames lighting the way Way to endless bliss Way to shared bliss Bliss envelops us Bliss echoes softly Softly glowing embers Softly arrives the sunset Sunset paints the sky Sunset whispers dreams Dreams of endless hues Dreams that dance on clouds Clouds cradle the sun Clouds a canvas of warmth Warmth fading gently Warmth in the awaken Awaken the night's embrace Awaken slowly the sea Sea of dreams and wishes Sea dark in the night Night draped in velvet Night whispers its secrets Secrets held by the moon Secrets sung by the stars Stars as lanterns glowing Stars in a starry night Night unfolding its beauty Night covered in stardust Stardust shines on flowers Stardust is delicate Delicate Flowers...

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Date: 2/18/2024 4:05:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go! Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 2/18/2024 5:49:00 AM
Thanks Sara!
Date: 2/17/2024 11:22:00 AM
Well done on an excellent blitz, especially as it was your first time.. you missed the ... from line 49, other wise it was very good.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 2/18/2024 5:51:00 AM
Hi! Thanks for the placement, I'm delighted! Indeed it was my first poem with this structure, but I enjoyed writing it so much! I've been writing more blitzs since I learnt how to write them. Next time I won't forget the ...!
Date: 1/27/2024 12:50:00 PM
Wonderful!
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 2/18/2024 5:51:00 AM
Thanks Kim!!
Date: 1/26/2024 11:29:00 PM
Very well written!
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 1/27/2024 8:30:00 AM
I tried my best! Thanks!
Date: 1/25/2024 6:23:00 AM
I really enjoyed reading this, Ariana, such beautiful imagery woven throughout. I hope you try this form again, you wrote it so well. John
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 1/25/2024 9:43:00 AM
Hi John! It's the first time I try such form, but I'm surely doing this again! Thanks for reading my poem!
Date: 1/25/2024 5:38:00 AM
I have to say this is quite good. You're very talented Ariana
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/25/2024 6:32:00 AM
None of us here are anywhere near perfection Ariana. Maybe there's no such thing. This was just plain good
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 1/25/2024 6:12:00 AM
I tried my best. I know it's not perfect but I tried my best. Thanks Tom, your comments are very kind.
Date: 1/24/2024 5:26:00 AM
Oh my, this is such a gorgeous Blitz, dear Ariana.. It's indeed an entertaining and a bit tricky form as we've to maintain the flow, but you've really excelled and done a wonderful job here! I absolutely love the imagery that you've woven throughout.. It feels almost whimsical and mystical, in many ways.. "Clouds cradle the sun", "Stories are written in scars", "Stars as lanterns glowing" Oh my, how magical! And i love that ending as well.. Best wishes for the contest :) the title is wonderful!
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 1/24/2024 7:00:00 AM
Oh this is a really kind comment! I'm very grateful for such high praise. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. I tried my very best.
Date: 1/23/2024 10:27:00 AM
Wonderfully written blitz poem, Ariana! GL on the contest. Soupmail.
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Ariana Pataki
Date: 1/23/2024 10:47:00 AM
Hi Edward! It was really fun, and challenging. I tried my best! Thanks.

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