Time

In my bed,
time is sleepy stretching,
for the Wind I wait....
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Guzzi Avatar
January 15, 2011 at 1:40 PM
gentle..it is senyru because it is about a person not the wind, both forms do not use capitalization and neither uses a title, line 2 1 "p" in sleepy...put the subject in line 1, the action in lines 2 & 3, is the subject time, if so put it in line 1 & the you stretching in the bed in line 2 at the end of the second line you put --- to indicate a slight shift in thought Light & Love
Kendrick Avatar
June 1, 2010 at 9:31 AM
Great write that makes me feel the mood of nighttime and the sighing of the wind that hums me to sleep...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
Guzzi Avatar
May 29, 2010 at 9:40 AM
2 "ee' 's line 2 interesting write! Light & Love
Mehta Avatar
May 26, 2010 at 6:20 PM
Nice images with deep meaning
Monteblanco Avatar
May 26, 2010 at 3:00 PM
Great poem. I loved it!
Carr Avatar
May 26, 2010 at 2:32 PM
i wish i could write in such few words and mean so much.. i enjoyed
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