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*Image of Excitement Unlocked giphy by Escape Hunt. Time Life millstones pressures creation to sort through essential time, balms the albatross over seasonable means, paid in court. A past fraught in qualm, trading ourselves short, wills the clock face, hands smile--it sates the loss... life millstones pressures creation to sort, from the moment that stretches to distort, spoke present to a fresh reference, toss over seasonable means, paid in court. Seconds, minutes, hours ticking by, assort cleft role of abled spread twinklings as moss. Life millstones pressures creation to sort that infinite future's schedule, escort zealous flashes duly, that run across over seasonable means, paid in court. Shapes an hourglass, together, we support an eternal measured us, reach across. Life millstones pressures creation to sort over seasonable means, paid in court. 2020 June 30 *1st Place* A Brian Strand you choose ~~Brian Strand: Judged 2021 August 12 *1st Place* Time- 8 Word Challenge ~~Constance La France: Judged 2020 July 06

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/14/2021 2:15:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your winning work. Way to go. These are not so easy to write but you have done a good job. Congrats on your wins with it. Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/14/2021 2:43:00 AM

Sara, I appreciate your considerations, and I do agree that at times we draw blanks as oppose to when words fall into their rightful place, c'est la vie mon amie, Aloha!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/12/2021 11:00:00 PM

Your poems are rich in thoughts and style. This is one of them. Beautifully penned. Congratulations on your win!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/13/2021 12:08:00 AM

Christuraj, the world knows you well as they echo your popularity by the words you tender, blessings my friend, Aloha!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/10/2020 3:54:00 AM

This excellent William! This form is a challenge for me. You did really well! Congratulations on your First Placement! xxoo

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/10/2020 3:57:00 AM

I appreciate your considerations, Connie, for they are always well-received, "A hui hou!" -- Aloha~@William

Constance La France

Date: 7/7/2020 4:20:00 PM

William, congratulations on your win in my time contest, excellent writing and a FAV for me, I like your reading of the poem also _Constance

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/7/2020 4:52:00 PM

Wow, my heartfelt thanks truly, Constance, for you humble me by your kindness, as always -- Aloha~@William

Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/7/2020 1:52:00 PM

You created this one using Villanelle William yet such a natural flow of emotions! Brilliant poetry. Congratulations on your top win :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/7/2020 1:59:00 PM

I am appreciative of your charm-filled considerations, Aditi, thank you -- Aloha~@William

Winged Warrior

Date: 7/7/2020 8:09:00 AM

Congrats!! on the win William...great verse my friend...^WW^ :o)

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/7/2020 10:27:00 AM

Many thanks, Winged Warrior, for your shared thoughts and time -- Aloha~@William

Jenish Somadas

Date: 7/7/2020 12:11:00 AM

Creative Villanelle William.. You used the words well.. Congrats on your great win..

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/7/2020 1:16:00 AM

I am grateful for kind thoughtfulness, Jenish, a treasured share, truly -- Aloha~@William

John Watt

Date: 7/6/2020 11:52:00 PM

Nice use of strong words to make the case of time as a tyrant, William. I especially liked albatross and millstone. I see you were careful to keep the 8 words out of your repeating lines. I made that mistake in my quatern and had to rewrite it because I had used the word 'time' 4 times! Big oops, and a lesson painfully learned. Congrats to you for your top finish and a great write about time ~ John

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/7/2020 1:11:00 AM

Admirably amazing, your expressed choice of words, artfully done my friend, in careful measure of interpreting your fine endeavors--my extended courtesies for your accolades! -- Aloha~@William

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/1/2020 9:05:00 AM

Excellent writing, dear friend. I wish you all the best in the contest. Blessings and love sent your way, Gina

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/1/2020 12:27:00 PM

Such kind words that brighten my morning tea, Regina, God bless -- Aloha~@William

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/1/2020 6:38:00 AM

You wrapped those words expertly, William--in this difficult to execute form.

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/1/2020 12:24:00 PM

I appreciate your indulgence, Vijay, pleased to have you share your time with mines -- Aloha~@William