Tides

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Alert we wake to a morningtide Bright-eyed inside, when it rains noontide We downed a few All drunk we knew We danced to wrong homes at eveningtide

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/22/2019 2:14:00 PM

This is a really fun poem - an excellent write as usual William - hugs, Jennifer.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/22/2019 7:11:00 PM

Attempt at levity there Jennifer--thank you, Aloha wk

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/21/2019 2:15:00 PM

That last line made me laugh!

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/21/2019 3:54:00 PM

Ah, the pith of the matter, thanks Caren, Aloha wk

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/21/2019 12:55:00 PM

A fun piem and better yet, well done. Panagiota

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/21/2019 3:52:00 PM

Thank you much Panagiota, Aloha wk

Alkas Poetry

Date: 5/21/2019 8:21:00 AM

Yes we can understand having drunk so much ! The form of writing was splendid! salute alkasWUP

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/21/2019 9:40:00 AM

Thank you my friend Alkas, Aloha wk

Ralph Sergi

Date: 5/20/2019 6:28:00 PM

Hi William: This is a unique poem that I guess when you had the thought , you wrote it rapidly. My compliments! Read my carpe diem again, I changed it.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/20/2019 6:32:00 PM

Will do Ralph, Aloha wk