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Tick Tock

i look at the walls around me bootleg-moonshine shadows dancing a waltz atop nighttide's stage yet i am empty of my own emotion alone, covered in reflections of us. i still smell your scent linger in every deep breath within this humid air and i choke up another piece of me as the hands of time rape me of all my colored thoughts i now dream in black and white in a room dressed the same. the clock laughs in seconds mocking raindrops on rooftops my eyes cry the same tune over and over again as time becomes my enemy i can almost hear your footsteps tracing the stairs, approaching me they fill the voids within my heart, momentarily, yet it beats no more for love than the clock on the wall, it's just there the same tick tock, tick tock... memories fade with night Verse a Favoured form,any theme Poetry Contest Sponsored by Brian Strand Sandra Adams 9/11/13

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Date: 10/13/2013 9:26:00 PM
awesome win........SKAT
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Date: 10/11/2013 1:52:00 PM
Sandra, congrats on your winning placement in the Songs to Poetry contest! An incredible write...I love how you created a story that could stand without the song. Great work!! Love and blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 10/11/2013 6:26:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words Rhonda :)
Date: 10/11/2013 9:04:00 AM
Congrats on your great win..Way to go..Sara
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Date: 10/11/2013 6:25:00 PM
Thank you Sara :)
Date: 10/11/2013 4:17:00 AM
Congrats on your great win!
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Date: 10/11/2013 6:25:00 PM
thank you Kelly :)
Date: 10/10/2013 8:44:00 PM
Hi Sandra, , Awesome Songs to Poetry ... congrats~ LINDA
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Date: 10/11/2013 6:24:00 PM
thank you very much Linda :)
Date: 10/8/2013 10:42:00 AM
Another winning piece........I agree with Deb.....you have some unique lines, and metaphors!! Love it!
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Date: 10/11/2013 6:24:00 PM
Thank you so much Carrie :)
Date: 10/8/2013 1:10:00 AM
So beautiful this is..Congrat on your placing : )
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Date: 10/11/2013 6:24:00 PM
thank you charmain :)
Date: 10/7/2013 7:28:00 PM
I loved how you did not retell the songs! So many fav line [bootlegged moonshine shadows! WOW] Congrad's on your verse winning! Light & Love
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Date: 10/7/2013 7:49:00 PM
thank you so much for my win in your contest as well as for hosting the contest :) you made my night brighter! Hugs
Date: 9/16/2013 8:07:00 AM
I LOVE how you did this contest. What a perfect entry. I too am drawn toward this particular song and hope to post a poem later this week for that contest. Hope you score BIG.
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Date: 10/7/2013 7:50:00 PM
Thank you Andrea...hugs :)
Date: 9/15/2013 8:11:00 AM
This is simply brilliant writing Sandra! I will put this in my favorites. You are a very talented poet. l won't forget to seek out your work to read in the future. Truly inspiring!
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:04:00 AM
Thank you so much for your kind response Connie! Have a great Sunday....hugs :)
Date: 9/14/2013 10:30:00 PM
Excellent free verse for the theme contest my dear friend Sandra. I love it and so enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck in the contest. Thank you so much as well for stopping by on my poem. More blessings! love lots,Leonora
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:05:00 AM
Thank you Leonora for reading and replying to my poem! Have a great Sunday! Hugs
Date: 9/14/2013 3:00:00 PM
Great contest entry for my contest [Leaving on a Jet Plan would work as the reference] Light & Love
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:06:00 AM
Thank you for the kind reply and suggestion Debbi...have a great sunday...hugs
Date: 9/14/2013 1:28:00 PM
intrinsicaly expressed in sways of beautiful language of time's ticks, sandra... wonderful!..;) huggs
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:07:00 AM
Thank you Nette for the kind reply...I am honored by your words, you are a fine poet....hugs :)
Date: 9/14/2013 1:24:00 PM
Powerful imagery, I am curious why you are refering to yourself with a amall i ??
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:09:00 AM
thanks Rick...just my style...I often don't use caps in many of my poems (I really don't know why)...always been that way...hugs
Date: 9/14/2013 9:18:00 AM
Ahh!! Emotive and expressive work..Enjoyed reading your work that expresses so much emotion...Thanks for the visit to my page..Your comments are uplifting..Sara
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:09:00 AM
Thank you Sara for your very kind reply! Hugs
Date: 9/12/2013 2:41:00 PM
Awesome writing Poetess! A nice intense read here. Cindy
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:10:00 AM
Thank you Cindy, have a great sunday! Hugs
Date: 9/12/2013 12:17:00 PM
a haunting piece Sandra....well penned
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:10:00 AM
Thanks Joseph, your replies are always so kind :) Hugs
Date: 9/12/2013 10:56:00 AM
POWERFUL PIECE OF WRITING
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:11:00 AM
Thank you Liam...hope you have a great sunday! Hugs
Date: 9/12/2013 12:09:00 AM
Excellent write Sandra - well expressed thoughts. I like how you've paralleled the heart to the clock. Very well penned.
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:12:00 AM
Thank you so much Vicky...I often think of a heartbeat as being similar to a clock....have a great sunday :)
Date: 9/12/2013 12:02:00 AM
after reading this, I had to go to my list of fave poets and see if I had ever included you on the list. DANG. You were't there. well, I am remedying it RIGHT now. you are a splendid poet.
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:13:00 AM
wow, thanks for your kind reply Andrea....I am honored coming from a great poetess as yourself! Hugs :)
Date: 9/11/2013 9:08:00 PM
Sandra, this is an excellent write! I love the descriptive language you used. Going in my favs! Love, Kim
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Date: 9/15/2013 9:14:00 AM
Thank you so much Kim....have a great sunday! Hugs :)