Tick Tock

i look at the walls around me
bootleg-moonshine shadows dancing
a waltz atop nighttide's stage
yet i am empty of my own emotion
alone, covered in reflections of us.

i still smell your scent
linger in every deep breath
within this humid air
and i choke up another piece of me
as the hands of time rape me 
of all my colored thoughts
i now dream in black and white
in a room dressed the same.

the clock laughs in seconds
mocking raindrops on rooftops 
my eyes cry the same tune
over and over again
as time becomes my enemy

i can almost hear your footsteps
tracing the stairs, approaching me
they fill the voids within my heart,
momentarily, yet it beats no more for love
than the clock on the wall,
it's just there the same
tick tock, tick tock...

memories fade with night



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Sandra Adams  9/11/13

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Skat A

Date: 10/13/2013 9:26:00 PM

awesome win........SKAT

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 10/11/2013 1:52:00 PM

Sandra, congrats on your winning placement in the Songs to Poetry contest! An incredible write...I love how you created a story that could stand without the song. Great work!! Love and blessings, Rhonda

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/11/2013 6:26:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words Rhonda :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/11/2013 9:04:00 AM

Congrats on your great win..Way to go..Sara

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/11/2013 6:25:00 PM

Thank you Sara :)

Kelly Zakerski

Date: 10/11/2013 4:17:00 AM

Congrats on your great win!

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/11/2013 6:25:00 PM

thank you Kelly :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/10/2013 8:44:00 PM

Hi Sandra, , Awesome Songs to Poetry ... congrats~ LINDA

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/11/2013 6:24:00 PM

thank you very much Linda :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/8/2013 10:42:00 AM

Another winning piece........I agree with Deb.....you have some unique lines, and metaphors!! Love it!

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/11/2013 6:24:00 PM

Thank you so much Carrie :)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/8/2013 1:10:00 AM

So beautiful this is..Congrat on your placing : )

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/11/2013 6:24:00 PM

thank you charmain :)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/7/2013 7:28:00 PM

I loved how you did not retell the songs! So many fav line [bootlegged moonshine shadows! WOW] Congrad's on your verse winning! Light & Love

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/7/2013 7:49:00 PM

thank you so much for my win in your contest as well as for hosting the contest :) you made my night brighter! Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/16/2013 8:07:00 AM

I LOVE how you did this contest. What a perfect entry. I too am drawn toward this particular song and hope to post a poem later this week for that contest. Hope you score BIG.

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/7/2013 7:50:00 PM

Thank you Andrea...hugs :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/15/2013 8:11:00 AM

This is simply brilliant writing Sandra! I will put this in my favorites. You are a very talented poet. l won't forget to seek out your work to read in the future. Truly inspiring!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:04:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind response Connie! Have a great Sunday....hugs :)

Len Gasun

Date: 9/14/2013 10:30:00 PM

Excellent free verse for the theme contest my dear friend Sandra. I love it and so enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck in the contest. Thank you so much as well for stopping by on my poem. More blessings! love lots,Leonora

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:05:00 AM

Thank you Leonora for reading and replying to my poem! Have a great Sunday! Hugs

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/14/2013 3:00:00 PM

Great contest entry for my contest [Leaving on a Jet Plan would work as the reference] Light & Love

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:06:00 AM

Thank you for the kind reply and suggestion Debbi...have a great sunday...hugs

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/14/2013 1:28:00 PM

intrinsicaly expressed in sways of beautiful language of time's ticks, sandra... wonderful!..;) huggs

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:07:00 AM

Thank you Nette for the kind reply...I am honored by your words, you are a fine poet....hugs :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/14/2013 1:24:00 PM

Powerful imagery, I am curious why you are refering to yourself with a amall i ??

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:09:00 AM

thanks Rick...just my style...I often don't use caps in many of my poems (I really don't know why)...always been that way...hugs

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/14/2013 9:18:00 AM

Ahh!! Emotive and expressive work..Enjoyed reading your work that expresses so much emotion...Thanks for the visit to my page..Your comments are uplifting..Sara

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:09:00 AM

Thank you Sara for your very kind reply! Hugs

Cindy Lu

Date: 9/12/2013 2:41:00 PM

Awesome writing Poetess! A nice intense read here. Cindy

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:10:00 AM

Thank you Cindy, have a great sunday! Hugs

Joseph May

Date: 9/12/2013 12:17:00 PM

a haunting piece Sandra....well penned

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:10:00 AM

Thanks Joseph, your replies are always so kind :) Hugs

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/12/2013 10:56:00 AM

POWERFUL PIECE OF WRITING

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:11:00 AM

Thank you Liam...hope you have a great sunday! Hugs

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 9/12/2013 12:09:00 AM

Excellent write Sandra - well expressed thoughts. I like how you've paralleled the heart to the clock. Very well penned.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:12:00 AM

Thank you so much Vicky...I often think of a heartbeat as being similar to a clock....have a great sunday :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/12/2013 12:02:00 AM

after reading this, I had to go to my list of fave poets and see if I had ever included you on the list. DANG. You were't there. well, I am remedying it RIGHT now. you are a splendid poet.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/15/2013 9:13:00 AM

wow, thanks for your kind reply Andrea....I am honored coming from a great poetess as yourself! Hugs :)