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through the eyes 2

I’ve walked this path for 5 years 8pm curfew, out past 9pm grown-up up keep feet clicking hearing distant steps CVS, a coffee shop and a shoe store but no souls in sight tonight fear creeps up behind; held scream give me your money! unseen soul gives way to sole, knee buckle at demand gravity and knife becomes one spine bent vertical, at least one one spineless coward killed me for 5 years I’ve walked this path and for 5 dollars, a candy bar and heels too big to run in I’ve fallen right next to a CVS between the gutter and trash bins put out only 5 min prior I never noticed who did it But I’ll never forget the first time In 5 years I saw a rose that bloomed through the concrete

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Date: 8/19/2016 8:52:00 AM
I was hoping for a new one. Have a great day.
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Date: 8/18/2016 7:58:00 AM
I didn't realize this was your first offering to the soup. Welcome, I hope you enjoy your time here.
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Date: 8/17/2016 10:41:00 PM
So sad to be the victim...Congrats on your win.:) Sunita
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Date: 8/17/2016 9:16:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win.
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Date: 8/17/2016 7:36:00 AM
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Date: 8/16/2016 8:21:00 PM
Hi Damont, This is a well written debut poem. I have some good news ,you placed in your first contest. Congratulations P.S. Welcome to poetry soup. This is a place where can learn and grow from other poets like you. It's also a place to make new friends. I look forward to reading your poetry. When you have the time stop by my page:-) Alexis
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Date: 8/15/2016 12:47:00 AM
Hi Damont, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 8/14/2016 11:28:00 PM
Damot , Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**
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