Through the Eyes 2

I’ve walked this path for 5 years
8pm curfew, out past 9pm grown-up
up keep feet clicking hearing distant steps
CVS, a coffee shop and a shoe store 
but no souls in sight tonight

fear creeps up behind; held scream
give me your money! unseen
soul gives way to sole,
knee buckle at demand
gravity and knife becomes one
spine bent vertical, at least one
one spineless coward killed me

for 5 years I’ve walked this path
and for 5 dollars, a candy bar and
heels too big to run in I’ve fallen
right next to a CVS
between the gutter and trash bins
put out only 5 min prior

I never noticed who did it
But I’ll never forget the first time
In 5 years 
I saw a rose that bloomed through the concrete
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Lamoureux Avatar
August 19, 2016 at 8:52 AM
I was hoping for a new one. Have a great day.
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August 18, 2016 at 7:58 AM
I didn't realize this was your first offering to the soup. Welcome, I hope you enjoy your time here.
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August 17, 2016 at 10:41 PM
So sad to be the victim...Congrats on your win.:) Sunita
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August 17, 2016 at 9:16 AM
Congrats on a fine win.
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August 17, 2016 at 7:36 AM
Congratulations!
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August 16, 2016 at 8:21 PM
Hi Damont, This is a well written debut poem. I have some good news ,you placed in your first contest. Congratulations P.S. Welcome to poetry soup. This is a place where can learn and grow from other poets like you. It's also a place to make new friends. I look forward to reading your poetry. When you have the time stop by my page:-) Alexis
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August 15, 2016 at 12:47 AM
Hi Damont, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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August 14, 2016 at 11:28 PM
Damot , Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**
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