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Fictional poem for contest

my eyes dilate leaving him breathless-
seeking what should have been sought
yesterday and beyond kismet;
I reap in seeds that sow themselves-
(spread me over willows weeping)

he gazes at me with such depth;
sees the me I wish was there-
maybe he’s blinded by love and 
won’t ever see the demons within,
for they would chase him until he 
left…
     for good this time

I am but a woman longing for a place
to call home-
searching endlessly for that safe and 
comfortable bed to keep warm in winter, 
cover me gently as the moondust 
f
a
l
l
s
onto my bare feet,
with him beside me-
but then he’s left breathless and I am left…
                                                          restless

for there is no entrance sign to eternity when love
is your redemption-
                       and there is no threshold to forgiveness




136 words (falls is considered 1 word)

One Hundred and Thirty-Six Words Contest
John Lawless 
August 20, 2019

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 9/14/2019 7:20:00 AM
A great ending...congrats on your win.
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Date: 9/11/2019 8:20:00 AM
Creative winning work. Way to go for the perfect win. Congrats. Sara
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Date: 9/10/2019 5:11:00 PM
Congrats on your top placement Lu Loo. I enjoyed the read. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 9/10/2019 1:09:00 PM
Yes indeed John has impeccable taste this is definitely the top write, a worthy winner for sure, emotional roller coaster ride!
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Date: 9/10/2019 1:11:00 AM
Your poem starts off innocently enough, but the crescendo in the final lines left me speechless. Congratulations on your first place win with this magnificent poem, Lu Loo. FAVing it. ~Su BTW The heading is somewhat strange to me. Did you perhaps mean that it is written as a PERSONA?
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Date: 9/9/2019 10:42:00 PM
‘Lu Loo, Congratulations on your win. A brilliant ending! David’
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/10/2019 6:05:00 AM
thank you dear David :)-luloo
Date: 9/9/2019 8:55:00 PM
Lol I knew you nailed it girl! Beautifully done! Congrats on your well deserved win!;)
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Date: 9/10/2019 6:05:00 AM
many thanks lovely Brenda, hugs :)-luloo
Date: 9/9/2019 5:24:00 PM
The final tercet nailed it Lu Loo. A beautifully written twist filled read. Thanks for participating in the contest.
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/10/2019 6:05:00 AM
I am honored dear John, thank you so much :)-luloo
Date: 8/20/2019 11:53:00 AM
Really nicely done. I loved the feeling of this poem, the light and the dark of your thoughts and then to get to the end and find it was written for that contest just blew me away. Best of luck though you won't need it, this beauty will probably end up in the winners circle
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Date: 9/10/2019 6:04:00 AM
sorry for late response, thank you dear Chris :)-luloo