Thoughts Race

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The heavy fog slowly lifts in places
Open patches of spring delight and resounds
The look-out crow caws, joyous news abounds
As rooster's crows lands in hollow spaces
The rising sun warms pale skin with graces
Awareness of a stillness settles around
Coo of the dove seems to calm and propounds
Thoughts surface above the calm, one races


Wildlife has no idea of what's ahead
They know not that storms could come and flood nests
Dens, wreck havoc, seal their fate, end life's joy
Humans bounce singing there's nothing to dread
Weak, untested in the fire, growths arrest
One incident will probably destroy


Finis'

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Robert Lindley

Date: 4/1/2018 1:44:00 PM

A BRILLIANT SONNET MY FRIEND. You gave a great description of crows and Nature. A fav...

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/27/2018 9:31:00 PM

The look out crows bring the joyous news that spring is coming. Wow! Rooster's crows land in hollow spaces; exactly right. We have roosters behind us, and I do not hear them now. When it turns and warns of the possibility of what a storm could do, it is so on target. I have no words good enough, yet it's a fav for me.

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/18/2018 5:50:00 PM

Is this for Craig's contest, hope so its brilliant.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 3/19/2018 5:08:00 PM

Harry, No, I did not write this one for a contest just an out on the porch work. Sara..Thanks for dropping by ..

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/18/2018 1:25:00 PM

Sara, every line of your graceful and glorious sonnet is a scintillating beauty. Gorgeous, expressive imagery (especially your third and fourth lines - love the clever word play) and the last two lines are simply stunning so far .. already a fave! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/18/2018 5:24:00 PM

Vous avez fini, dear Sara. A lovely finish. Your first half was so beautifully done. Now your additional lines gorgeously compliment the first half and completes your theme wondrously. Your thought that races perfectly expresses the concerned wisdom of your life experiences.. a superb sonnet my friend.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 3/18/2018 4:09:00 PM

Susan, Your comments are uplifting. I still have six lines to go and have to decide which way I will carry out the thought that races. Sara