Thoughts

The Mask it cannot hide those feelings deep inside that squeeze the senses tight to try and recall a time of love,lust and sin then you realize now thoughts are all you have left Ralph Sergi Masquerade Contest April 25, 2014

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Ana Espinola Collins

Date: 5/14/2014 5:55:00 PM

Short but powerful! Great write Ralph :)Ana

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/6/2014 11:48:00 AM

Ralph, wow, I like this! this is how I feel right now. All I have left are my thoughts. Where has it all gone, why this heavy mask?? enjoyed , Congrats on your poem :) Linda

Ralph Sergi
Date: 5/6/2014 1:07:00 PM

Thanks, Linda: But I was just warned that I have to have one title beginning with a T. I did correct it. I was using her photo of the masks as a theme.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/1/2014 5:30:00 AM

andrea is right, sergi.. i gave this a slot because of content and flow.. kindly change the title to one word, starting with the letter T.. best cheers on your win in my contest.. huggs!

Ralph Sergi
Date: 5/6/2014 1:00:00 PM

Thanks foe the correction, nette. I did correct it. An Italian hug!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2014 6:33:00 PM

;this is nice, but do you know the rules of this form? You have to make one title and then all the first words of your acrostic going down have to begin with that letter. Go check out her example!

Ralph Sergi
Date: 5/6/2014 1:02:00 PM

Hi Andrea: Thank you for the correction. I did correct it. An Italian hug!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/26/2014 7:10:00 AM

Well crafted and well penned poem, Ralph

Ralph Sergi
Date: 4/28/2014 8:20:00 AM

Thank you , Dr. Ram. This is first attempt using the pleiades form.

Ivo Cos

Date: 4/26/2014 12:22:00 AM

I really enjoyed this. Fav'd!