This Lingers On

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For Joseph May's "Refrains in 8" Contest

4 lines per stanza, 16 Lines only

8 syllables per line, Example below

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Rhyme Scheme: aabB, ccbB, ddbB, eebB, Where B is the Refrain

There are gifts that I have treasured. One have I with worth unmeasured. One day I turned into a swan. In poetry, this lingers on. A young man smiled and gazed my way. The sun was he, and in his ray I basked as if in light of dawn. In poetry, this lingers on. To dulcet eyes that on me shone and love like I had never known in soft caresses I was drawn. In poetry, this lingers on. For his sweet kisses how I yearned when to his country he returned. Our time was swift and then was gone. In poetry, this lingers on.

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Terry Flood

Date: 3/21/2025 5:35:00 PM

I absolutely respect the sponsor’s decision, Andrea, but I would have given this a ’one’. A delightful (hmmm) read. Congrats on your win. Terry

Karen Jones

Date: 3/21/2025 10:49:00 AM

A sweet poem of longing how lovely Andrea! Congratulations on your win!

Joseph May

Date: 3/21/2025 7:18:00 AM

Very nicely penned Andrea, Congrats on your win

Quoth Theraven

Date: 3/15/2025 11:58:00 PM

Andrea, "One day I turned into a swan. In poetry, this lingers on" I will always listen to a heart that holds a truth we all can hold and share. Write on. -Richard

Joe Maverick

Date: 3/15/2025 1:30:00 PM

Dang it Andrea..You don't need him when you Have got us." I mean I'm like?? Well quite a few By myself.' Although Kim thinks I'm even more Numeous LOL)) Or she just might be mathamatically challenged? Although I do Value the compliment.' One thing is..I am steadily working out the steadfast level headed Ones.' Mind you I need them as i do get quite Religious as you know.' As a matter if fact your Haiku's caused a sorta re-lapse earlier.'

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/15/2025 3:10:00 PM

I have to have SOMEthing to inspire my romantic poems!!

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 3/15/2025 1:40:00 AM

Hello Andrea, beautifully written and a pleasurable read, not easily forgotten, my friend. Have a wonderful day.

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh

Date: 3/14/2025 9:25:00 PM

Moments pass but their emotional resonance endured through art and memory.The essence of love's beauty,it's transient nature,such experienced immortalized in poetry.So nicely penned.