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They'Re Playing Our Song

As the heavy wooden door creaked open
I could hear the church bell chime
All heads turned to witness your arrival
Tears filled my eyes as the organist played ‘our’ song…
Whitney Houston’s I will always love you
The sweet scent of gardenias filled the air as you passed by 
Your coffin was covered with your favourite flowers
I followed behind you and took my place in the pew
My darling … I will always love you

Submitted to best sad poem ever II
sponsored by Laura Loo
15th September 2015

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Neva Romaine Date: 11/10/2015 2:23:00 PM Hey Jan, a warm and hearty congratulations on your wonderful poem winning in the Trashed #3 contest! Chills went through me as I read it and I can hear Whitney's exquisite voice singing this heart wrenching song. I really do wonder about some of these contest judges - oh well - thanks to BW we get to enjoy your excellent poem for ourselves. Be Blessed, Neva Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/10/2015 2:31:00 PM I am so glad it placed this time - i do like the trashed and screwed contests for giving us the chance to showcase our poems again:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 11/10/2015 9:35:00 AM So heartfelt and loving, Jan. Congratulations on your poem finally featured on the winners list. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/10/2015 11:52:00 AM Thanks SandranI love these contests to give our poems a second chance:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless Date: 11/9/2015 12:32:00 PM Beautifully written Jan, congrats on the win. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/9/2015 12:49:00 PM Thanks John I love these contests that give our poems a second chance:-)hugs jan xx

Skat A Date: 11/9/2015 11:05:00 AM Jan, Congratulations on your Trashed #3 win. SKAT Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/9/2015 11:55:00 AM Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 9/17/2015 6:41:00 PM Beautifully written Jan. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:30:00 AM Thanks so much Eve:-) Hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish Date: 9/17/2015 5:48:00 PM A grievous loss. Nice tribute poem. Good luck in the contest. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:30:00 AM Thanks so much Matthew:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez Date: 9/17/2015 1:02:00 PM Such poignancy...sometimes you just go and drop a bomb on us with your writes, Jan. All the best! hugs! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:30:00 AM I have no control over my muse Kim I never know where she will take me and this one is a little sad:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 9/17/2015 2:53:00 AM Poignant and beautiful Jan. It is a wonderful entry for the contest. I can't keep up with the contests or the comments but I do what I can with my limited time on the computer because of my vision. Best of luck in the contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:29:00 AM Thanks so much Connie am struggling to keep up with life issues but still battling on - am thinking of yout too:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/16/2015 10:15:00 PM hey there, Jan. Taking me a long time to do comments and no time again for contest judging. OH MY. wish I had not seen that freaking movie today. Anyway, just dropping by to say hi!!Luv, Andrea Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:28:00 AM Thanks so much Andrea I do appreciate all your support:-) Hugs Jan xx

Angie Thomas Date: 9/16/2015 1:00:00 PM I have no words to describe this... its beautiful in a bittersweet way... **7** Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:28:00 AM Thanks so much Angie - its a bit of a heartbreaker:-) Hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen Date: 9/16/2015 8:43:00 AM A well and a beautiful write JAN. Hope to see this in the winner list... It is a lot brilliant......A.M. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:27:00 AM Thanks so much Afolabi:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/16/2015 1:24:00 AM wow, that one is heart breaking! you come up with such GREAT ideas, Jan. Your mind brims with them!! I hope this does well! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/16/2015 2:47:00 AM I hope Nette likes my interpretation of the 'music' theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie Date: 9/15/2015 8:38:00 PM Hello Jan... nice lyric Jan with a lot of emotion and sadness - Lindsay Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/16/2015 2:46:00 AM Thanks Lindsay:-) hugs Jan xx

Faye Gibson Date: 9/15/2015 8:37:00 PM Well done, Jan; a theme I would not have likely paired with music. Best wishes in the contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/16/2015 2:46:00 AM I'm not sure if it fits the bill for 'music' - I hope Nette likes my interpretation of the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Frederic Parker Date: 9/15/2015 6:45:00 PM the topic you picked is universal and sad,one we all have to face sometime..good luck in the contest Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/15/2015 6:47:00 PM I guess with my father's death this year I can write freely about such topics:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 9/15/2015 6:44:00 PM I can feel the tears flowing Jan...good luck Tim Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/15/2015 6:46:00 PM Thanks Tim I have to go with the flow of my muse ... but in reality I am in a good place and happy:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Tor Date: 9/15/2015 6:04:00 PM Jan I felt like I was there with you. Very sad and real. Nice write. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/15/2015 6:07:00 PM Thanks Michael:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance Date: 9/15/2015 5:38:00 PM aww... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/15/2015 5:40:00 PM Thanks Cas:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 9/15/2015 5:02:00 PM Very emotive, Jan. You ably touch upon all three requested senses and create the perfect atmpsphere. I love it! ~ Like you, I used flowers for smell, but while you base your poem on end of life, I base mine on the start of life! gl in the contest. Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/15/2015 5:07:00 PM Thanks Paul:-) I will drop by and read your poem Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx