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They Are Back

red shining nectar
the hovering hummingbirds
woman sweeps the porch

©Donna Jones

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Nancy Beckman

Date: 9/29/2018 9:52:00 PM

Short and sweet! I enjoyed this, Donna!

Robert Johnson

Date: 5/20/2013 10:00:00 AM

The freshness of spring in your poem has a ring. The snow shovels hanging, my heart starts to sing.

Poet Tacito

Date: 5/15/2013 9:47:00 PM

I love the atmosphere & setting here. I value the songbirds in the early morning sunrise. This is great!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/15/2013 11:45:00 AM

I've been trying to do the sweeping of the open carport this morn..I have to work a few minutes then rest because of my heart condition..Growing old is not for sissies..Enjoyed reading this creative work..Sara

Donna Jones
Date: 5/15/2013 3:39:00 PM

Thanks Sara ...I know what you mean...the garden work seems to be harder every year...I transplanted some iris..bulbs today now I'm calling it a day...

Jack Jordan

Date: 5/12/2013 7:08:00 PM

A fine haiku. You did a great job of describing the action in an absolutely minimal space. A very rich piece... Jack

Donna Jones
Date: 5/12/2013 8:11:00 PM

Thanks so much jack...:-) very kind...

James Marshall Goff

Date: 5/12/2013 5:01:00 AM

Donna, your kind words warm a frosty morn' here in Minnesota! Thank You! your twist here in line 3 is good....jimbo

Donna Jones
Date: 5/12/2013 6:45:00 AM

Thanks jimbo ..it just happened to be what was going on.so I wrote it that way..:-) have a good day

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/12/2013 12:18:00 AM

Do you have other "Friends" that nest in your yard,Donna?

Donna Jones
Date: 5/12/2013 6:50:00 AM

Many! There have been birds of every color at the feeders lately...and living in the country I live with everything from skunks to deer, coyote, fox, cougar, andeverything in between.. Squirrels are really the mostfun to watch...you?

Karen Anglesey

Date: 5/11/2013 9:27:00 PM

Very nice. I like the powerful images in such a short piece. Very artistic

Donna Jones
Date: 5/12/2013 6:53:00 AM

Thank you Karen....

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/11/2013 12:22:00 PM

So lovely, MD. Can I come and visit! :) You rock! XOXOX Haiku...lovely like U!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/13/2013 5:17:00 AM

Oh Donna...I don't know anything about these....humbly...I somehow don't dare write any anymore! You...my dear....you are soaring!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/11/2013 7:37:00 PM

Anytime....thank you...you helped teach me....I'm trying!

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 5/11/2013 6:49:00 AM

Excellent. Beautiful haiku. Enjoyed. Tfs

Donna Jones
Date: 5/11/2013 7:38:00 PM

I so appreciate this...thank you...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/11/2013 12:18:00 AM

oh it is great that they are back. And to make a poem like this one about it!!! I am waiting for my little swallows to reappear as well!!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/11/2013 7:59:00 PM

Thanks Andrea...hope your friends return soon....have a..great day....:-)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/10/2013 6:36:00 PM

I am least skilled at Haiku so I am a great admirer of a beauty like this one.

Donna Jones
Date: 5/10/2013 9:08:00 PM

Oh thanks Richard ..as you well know I am very new to them...:-)

David Scott

Date: 5/10/2013 4:40:00 PM

I WOULD NOT KNOW WHERE TO START HERE BUT WELL PUT THANKS FOR COMENTS ON MINE YOU HAVE SOUP XX DAVIDSCTT

Donna Jones
Date: 5/10/2013 9:09:00 PM

Thanks so much David...

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 5/10/2013 3:37:00 PM

Donna this a super Haiku. The third line is fabulous. My hardest line when I'm writing a Haiku. I love it. I'm putting it in my favorite. Warm Smile, Connie

Donna Jones
Date: 5/10/2013 9:11:00 PM

What an honor Connie...thanks...I was sweeping my porch being swarmed by the hummingbirds I feed wheninspired...:-)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/9/2013 9:32:00 PM

Wow, Donna! I am impressed by how well you are getting the hang of this. Line three is supposed to be the "u-turn" in your haiku, yet at the same time feel natural. I've heard some call haiku "the poetry of nouns" and you seem to get that as well. There is more power in simplicity, and to observe the things around you. Look forward to more!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/10/2013 9:12:00 PM

You are just the sweetest guy....thanks....

Joseph May

Date: 5/9/2013 7:23:00 PM

I enjoyed your poem Donna...beautiful imagery...hugs

Donna Jones
Date: 5/10/2013 9:14:00 PM

Im smiling Joseph...thanks....

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/9/2013 3:04:00 PM

- Well written Donna! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Donna Jones
Date: 5/9/2013 4:35:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise...

Painted Hunter

Date: 5/9/2013 1:26:00 PM

Is that you on the porch?...I'll bet it is. Love this haiku, Donna

Donna Jones
Date: 5/9/2013 4:37:00 PM

Yep...it's me...and these crazy guys would rather fight than eat! Dive bombing around my head while I try to sweep the porch...some gratitude for feeding them...ha!

Jack Ellison

Date: 5/9/2013 8:33:00 AM

"hovering hummingbirds" I can just picture it in my mind! You've got this haiku thing down pat my friend! Love ya dear Donna... hugs xoxox

Donna Jones
Date: 5/9/2013 4:45:00 PM

Hey Jack....yeah...just like little helicopters!!! Crazy little guys...like to fight...there are six places to eat at the feeder and they spend all their time fighting for one!..thanks for the nice word....still trying...

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/9/2013 1:27:00 AM

So spot on, donna... birds are lovely until they scatter their dirt, lol... shimmering 'ku.. so creative!..:) huggs

Donna Jones
Date: 5/9/2013 4:46:00 PM

Thank you so much nette .....:-)

Russell Sivey

Date: 5/8/2013 7:54:00 PM

ha ha, yes this is all too true with the presence of birds! They are, however, mighty birds these hummingbirds! These birds are beautiful, as is your poem, quite the glorious piece, Great Work!!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/9/2013 4:48:00 PM

As always, so nice to see your smile and know I have a nice word from you...thanks Russell.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 5/8/2013 5:34:00 PM

I see you have mastered the art of the Haiku as well (Where will it all end?) Lovely alliteration in the second line and the last line really sweeps me off my feet...Ow! I think I bruised my elbow! (Sorry, couldn't resist and please don't swat me with that broom) - Tim

Donna Jones
Date: 5/8/2013 6:45:00 PM

Don't worry...its my only mode of transportation..hahaha....wouldn't want to damage it!!!!..and thanks for the constructive criticism!!! I really need this help from my friends...I'm just learning!!! I went back and changed all five of my haiku...all big 5..woopie!!!!

Tim Ryerson
Date: 5/8/2013 5:39:00 PM

No capitalization required...Adds to the effect (Ouch!)

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