James Inman Poet Sonnet

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My first "attempt" at a HexSonnetta.  NOT for the contest!  Quite challenging, at least for me.

The Zoo Down Under

Lying on the hilltop
like moments in a dream,
the beauty so extreme,
when the blowing winds stop
I look through the treetop
and spy a monotreme.

Platypuses pass by
as wombats waddle through,
followed by kangaroo.
Emus could never fly
but they will always try
or wind up in a stew.

Strutting mist, slow and proud
animal shapes in clouds.


08/18/15

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Andrea Dietrich August 19, 2015 at 9:59 PM HEY, this is so cool to see a HEXSONNETTA!!! Glad it is not in my contest because as I was reading it, I thought, Hmmm, this form looks strangely familiar. And you GOT IT! well, the meter is a bit off, but the rhyme and the way you handled the theme are really great! This was a really CUTE one! James Inman August 20, 2015 at 12:13 AM It is a surprisingly challenging form. It is very difficult for me to to find the correct meter that matches the rhyme pattern. Your samples were very good until I tryed one then I realized they are great. The meter is why I didn't enter it. I almost didn't post it but thought, what the heck let's see what kind of comments I get.

Jan Allison August 18, 2015 at 4:03 PM What wonderful imagery James I will give this form a go too but meter is not my strenght - then again I'm not sure what is lol:-) :-) hugs jan xx Jan Allison August 18, 2015 at 5:23 PM :-) hugs Jan xx James Inman August 18, 2015 at 5:08 PM I think you meant to say what ISN'T your strength. Your poems are wonderful. Thanks for the visit, Jan. The form is more challenging then I thought it would be.