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My first "attempt" at a HexSonnetta. NOT for the contest! Quite challenging, at least for me.

Lying on the hilltop like moments in a dream, the beauty so extreme, when the blowing winds stop I look through the treetop and spy a monotreme. Platypuses pass by as wombats waddle through, followed by kangaroo. Emus could never fly but they will always try or wind up in a stew. Strutting mist, slow and proud animal shapes in clouds. 08/18/15

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2015 9:59:00 PM

HEY, this is so cool to see a HEXSONNETTA!!! Glad it is not in my contest because as I was reading it, I thought, Hmmm, this form looks strangely familiar. And you GOT IT! well, the meter is a bit off, but the rhyme and the way you handled the theme are really great! This was a really CUTE one!

James Inman
Date: 8/20/2015 12:13:00 AM

It is a surprisingly challenging form. It is very difficult for me to to find the correct meter that matches the rhyme pattern. Your samples were very good until I tryed one then I realized they are great. The meter is why I didn't enter it. I almost didn't post it but thought, what the heck let's see what kind of comments I get.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/18/2015 4:03:00 PM

What wonderful imagery James I will give this form a go too but meter is not my strenght - then again I'm not sure what is lol:-) :-) hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2015 5:23:00 PM

:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman
Date: 8/18/2015 5:08:00 PM

I think you meant to say what ISN'T your strength. Your poems are wonderful. Thanks for the visit, Jan. The form is more challenging then I thought it would be.