The World Aint Mine

I love money but it will never become the death of me/
I love poetry so that must become my destiny/
I love my sight but i would trade it just so i can see/
A new vision/
Threw out the darkest night/
A poetic collision/
To help me develop a new sight/
To help me make my decision/
And over come my fear of this new hight/
To guide me threw the competition/
And become my new light/  
Despite... 
The fact that da world aint mine/
So I carry the vision in my mind/
just in case i go blind/
And attempt rewind/
Time and watch as the hands on the clock rotate counter clock wise/
And I watch this all behind the darkness of my brown eyes/
For those of you that cant tell that means my eyes are shut tight/
And I allow the darkest vision to become my inspiration and light/
Despite....
The fact that the world aint mine/
So I take the batteries out of my watch to try to save time/
So that I wont be late standing in heaven's line/
With several questions on my mind/
Like dear lord please tell me is this my sign/
Am i pose to release my thought in this poetic rhyme/
Is this the reason you gave me this talent to deposit a poetic hymn/
I stand with the questions build inside of me/
All I can do is wait patently/
For my turn/
Hopeful I slip and fall and that will be another lesson learned/
Maybe that is my main concern/
I sit and wonder what is my main purpose in life/
Sometimes I catch myself adjusting the lens in my glasses to try 2 develop and deliver  a new sight/
Now that aint right/
Im trying to exceed to my highest level in life/
But i cant do it cuz im scared of heights/
Im in life's airport lookin for my flight/
Cuz i dont see what the purpose is/
I mean tell me if you feeling this/
Tell me If you hearing this/
I mean let me know do you think I sound ignorant/
Ignorance is bliss/
But its more noticeable then this/
Word..../
this sounds like something i never heard/
Even though its hard to believe this is my spoken word/

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 7/2/2009 8:58:00 PM
Awesome write here, Kareena !! Reads like someone performing a rap ... smile ... Welcome to PoetrySoup !
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Date: 6/30/2009 10:09:00 AM
Terrific write Kareena, well written>>James
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Date: 6/30/2009 2:56:00 AM
This is actually really Good hun :Time and watch as the hands on the clock rotate counter clock wise/ And I watch this all behind the darkness of my brown eyes/ For those of you that cant tell that means my eyes are shut tight/ And I allow the darkest vision to become my inspiration and light/ Love this stanza alot!The rhyme flow is incredible!Keep it up=)
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Date: 6/29/2009 7:01:00 PM
"I love my sight but i would trade it just so i can see," that's a powerful line." "Im trying to exceed to my highest level in life," I'm striving for this, too.
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Date: 6/29/2009 6:12:00 PM
Hello Kareena, Welcome to the soup! you have a fantastic start here, let me read the rest and I will comment on your them all plus latest.-AA-Always Alexandra, Sandra Hudson
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Date: 6/29/2009 6:04:00 PM
Kareena, it's ok to utilize 'spoken' linguistics in your work! see my haiku "Mojo Buttons" I wrote just a few days ago! I often utilize this technique to emphasize my pure feelings...I feel if I write honestly, the reader will receive all I got!!! and you have shown us a beautiful stream of thought here! welcome to the soup! thanks for your warm comments! and keep writin'!!!! Love, Jim
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Date: 6/29/2009 4:56:00 PM
It should have been listed as a rhyme. It is a good one, too. Do you go to readings? Fine work! Sincerely Matthew Anish
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Date: 6/29/2009 4:34:00 PM
i especially love the first 10 lines! A+ job (:
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Date: 6/29/2009 4:22:00 PM
another poem that maybe needing some stanzas so it dont run altogether and here is where you need to cap those small I's outside that truely a great poem just needs alittle help thanks for sharing
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Date: 6/28/2009 4:15:00 PM
this is a really great poem!...well done!!...luke
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Date: 6/28/2009 3:26:00 PM
I feel, I hear you
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