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ThE WoRkS

Though there's a change in Circes
      Still the same whenever we unify
    With exchanged smiles and smirks
     It would seem between her and l
  
     With all the uncontrollable quirks
     Emotions are on an all time high
     With the constant tugs and jerks
     Their is this twinkle in her eye

     The image of her whenever it lurks
     Theirs a slight murmur a little syh
     That feeling when all the fireworks
     And supernova's begin filling the sky

     
     
    

An extension of poem so sweet

Copyright © David Scott | Year Posted 2022

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Nancy Kaufman Date: 3/25/2023 6:08:00 PM I forget what this rhyme scheme is called but this is a wonderful descriptive write. Enjoyed it. Nancy Login to Reply David Scott Date: 7/18/2023 10:10:00 AM did want to rework this like others think the form is called abab im told i have at least another 58 in this pattern i wrote over last three years pandemic keeping head bizzy taking bits from old writes extending on those bits

Laura Breidenthal Date: 12/6/2022 12:33:00 PM Love this gorgeous piece. Sounds like a magnetic connection. Those last lines are so beautiful! Amazing work, David! Always, Laura Login to Reply David Scott Date: 3/2/2023 9:57:00 AM not been on here for a while want to update this peace reedit bit like others got a whole barrage of poems need reworking just so much going on at moment feeling connected that would be nice only ever experienced once thankyou are for kind words xx

Evelyn Judy Buehler Date: 2/12/2022 9:50:00 PM I love the beautiful imagery of this terrific poem. So electrifying! :) Login to Reply Evelyn Judy Buehler Date: 2/13/2022 3:42:00 PM You are quite welcome. It's great to have you back on the soup. I think you have done very well with this poem. The entire poem has got to be amazing! xx David Scott Date: 2/13/2022 11:57:00 AM Thank you for your kindness and words not been on soup for while not as often as used to be l was trying to be more poetic but create a picture of these feelings emotions like lve done with a few others this was only one verse from an old poem called sensual enjoyments just tryed to add too xx