Marilene Evans Poet Monoku

The Woman Who Raised Me 'Hlm'

riding in Amtrak
southbound to San Diego
viewing scenic coast

Be with my Mommy sometimes on weekend.
The time for the two of us, when we tend
to act like silly girls.
Dancing, doing some twirls
while singing karaoke songs we shared.

she has been gone for years; but our times together live on, I miss her.


1/22/22    Charlie Hai-Lim-Ku Poetry
                Charles Messina

Used:        How Many Syllables  (5/7/5 - 10/10/6/6/10 - 17)                
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Sara Kendrick March 14, 2022 at 3:46 AM I have read your winning entry and was delighted to see it on the winners' list. Congratulations on your place of honor. Way to go. Sara Marilene Evans March 14, 2022 at 12:45 PM Thank you for visiting, Sara! I appreciate it. Have a great day.

Christuraj Alex March 11, 2022 at 5:11 AM Great missing. Beautifully written. Congratulations! Marilene Evans March 14, 2022 at 12:44 PM Thanks so much, Christuraj! Sorry for not responding sooner. Have a great day.

Charles Messina March 11, 2022 at 3:47 AM Marilene, although I liked your poem, the last line in your limerick did not rhyme with lines 2 and 3. So sorry had to give you an HM. Hope all is well. Hugs Charlie Marilene Evans March 14, 2022 at 12:43 PM Charlie, thank you very much for my placement considering I made a boo... boo... You do not have to be sorry. Thanks again for your kindness... and for pointing it out for me. I am well, just wrapped up with many things I need to attend to. Pardon me, for my lateness in responding. Have a great day.