The Withdrawing Room

Unrhymed tercets

The Withdrawing Room

Huddled together in this abstemious grey chamber
no windows or means of escape walls closing in
trapped where the un-sanctified transactions are made 


Daunting without exit the silent screams go unheard 
ashen skin with darting eyes never looking up
forever too frightened of seeing the truth reflected back 

In the unholy grail in visions of comrades within this un-sacred act of ransom 
the collective voice of the masked chorus urging them on wards 
then the integrated tragedy of hidden fears and secrets

A living sacrifice under this bargain where no one wins or gains
without boundaries of mortal limits there exists in this gunmetal airless demise 
unfettered woefulness and vainglory vie for victory 

The innocent victim's now the pawn's forgotten as pride twists obscurities 
severing the umbilical cord drowning breaths of existence
the sterile smell of unfinished lives permeating into the coal and ice


Tiny little footprints always remain's inside the womb's silenced facts 
the living water of life breaks no longer flows through the natural cord
leaving a chorus of continuous phantom's chanting in mendacious unity  

Opening the door of perdition where the tactical glare of a butchers knife 
held under a ghostly specter of a child that might have been treasured 
a face imagined but never seen and names never uttered 

A tortured remembrance of a pardon held precious beauty once
soon the vapour of shame burns off in an emptiness that still remains
glazes over a ruby rare passion 

Where fear & the constant loathing cannot fathom the uncertainties 
this future brings forth in the immenseness of what might have been 
not touching the soul properly 

The unborn yet to speak?
silenced unadorned gone forever jewel's 
always held within prayers of the faithful loving grace


a co written piece by Liam Mcdaid & Donna Loughman
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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De Beaulieu Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 8:14 PM
Hello Donna, this is a deep beautiful written poem. Have a nice evening my friend.
Loughman Avatar
October 28, 2017 at 8:35 PM
Hello, thank you so much for your comment! I really appreciate your feedback. You have a wonderful evening as well! :-)
Trifiatis Avatar
October 3, 2017 at 8:12 AM
No wonder that such a masterful writing comes out of the collaboration of Liam and yourself dear , Donna! Congratulations!
Loughman Avatar
October 3, 2017 at 10:51 AM
Thank you so much! I appreciate your feedback!
Mcdaid Avatar
October 2, 2017 at 1:24 PM
also thank you silent one anne lise and gary for your wonderful comments i pray you all have a blessed week ahead
Mcdaid Avatar
October 2, 2017 at 1:23 PM
thank you donna for the pleasure of joining ink on this soul felt subject your pen shone golden
Loughman Avatar
October 2, 2017 at 8:53 PM
Liam, thank you...Always an honor to write with you!
Bateman Avatar
October 2, 2017 at 11:24 AM
Hello Donna!! Best Wishes to you and Liam with this very intriguing and deeply articulated Tercet write. It's message is truly passionate and powerful. Excellent Work!! A great collaboration!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Loughman Avatar
October 2, 2017 at 12:05 PM
Gary, thank you so much!! Donna:-)
Andresen Avatar
October 1, 2017 at 8:09 AM
- Never got a chance ... a deep and excellent poem, Donna and Liam :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Loughman Avatar
October 1, 2017 at 4:53 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise! I appreciate your feedback!
One Avatar
October 1, 2017 at 4:58 AM
A thought provoking collaboration.. You two write very well
Loughman Avatar
October 1, 2017 at 4:55 PM
Thank you! It’s always appreciated when you comment!
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