The Window

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my eyes are open no thoughts to disturb the silent space the mind has become a void where existence is only a breath exhaling desolation and cold I peek through curtains to find the world alive filled with noise and motion the light outside, the dark inside two worlds separated by a pane of glass it reveals how thin the distance is between yesterday and today it all appears the same, trapped in a darkness that has finally bloomed like weeds from a mold that entrenched itself long ago when I was a frivolous farmer consuming everything I grew without care or reservation not thinking of the dark husks I left scattered on the empty fields of my needs tomorrow haunts me and it has yet to arrive I close the curtain and cry, where no one hears me 8/17/17

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Dean Wood

Date: 8/20/2017 5:34:00 PM

"two worlds separated by a pane of glass" Frederic, this is what I would expect to read in a Premium winner! Wow! Truth be told, I have lived this. Other's say it is simple, just go outside. If only it were that easy. This is a powerfully moving piece of art. Congratulations on a well deserved win!

Janis Thompson

Date: 8/20/2017 2:21:00 PM

Very moving. I have tear filled eyes. Congratulations

L. J. Carber

Date: 8/20/2017 12:15:00 PM

You use of metaphor is exquisite, profound-- my highest compliment: I wish I had written this!

Line Gauthier

Date: 8/20/2017 9:25:00 AM

Strong poem. Definitely a winner !!

Donna Roberts

Date: 8/20/2017 8:55:00 AM

Open that window, let the breeze flow age is sage, plant a new blossom to grow! Congratulations fellow poet.

Glen Schwartz

Date: 8/17/2017 8:09:00 PM

Great Write , so sad. To dread the coming of another day. I think we all feel this way at one time or another. But there is always hope :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/17/2017 10:51:00 AM

A well written sad, lonely write, yet many can face this in their lives and reflect back on the past, worry about tomorrow, etc. Very well expressed in these words Frederic.