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*Image of Patronus by Wizarding World The White Doe and The River Of Life Comes a white doe, quaint sight a wandering, Murmurs, her head swerves about, hesitates, A snow owl offering sky, pondering, Nibble's green herbs with care then elevates, Hooves paves a path, my blue being, surges clear, Alert nose take air, head bent back, above, Unaware, her head drops, tickles my sphere, Cast her spot of me, blanched soul feel her shove, Tempt, I tide my being, yet pursuit was keen, The full breadth of her trots to my chilled beat, She alights her weight to level her being, Trots to shore, genteel flow, dares to repeat, Perchance another day of challenging, Comes a white doe, quaint sight a wandering. 2019 May 12 *1st Place* ALL YOURS(JUN 8) ~~Brian Strand: Judged 2021 June 08

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Date: 6/17/2021 1:27:00 PM
Congrats on your winner. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 6/17/2021 3:50:00 PM
My thanks, Sara, for your generosity my friend, Aloha!
Date: 6/9/2021 4:03:00 AM
Wonderful.....Congrats on your win William....Hugs, Shonima.
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Date: 6/9/2021 7:16:00 AM
I appreciate your thoughtful considerations, Shonima, Aloha!
Date: 6/8/2021 4:54:00 PM
Classic imagery holds the moment from first phrase on. Congratulations on your first place finish.
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Date: 6/9/2021 12:56:00 AM
My thanks truly, Greg, your words are uplifting for the soul my friend, Aloha!
Date: 6/8/2021 3:00:00 PM
Excellent imagery, William! Congrats on your win in Brian's contest! Blessings, Kim M
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Date: 6/9/2021 12:55:00 AM
Blessings to you as well, Kim, you are heaven sent my friend, Aloha!
Date: 6/8/2021 2:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your win William, you penned a fantastic poem shining with excellent imagery and incredible symbolism. You deserve it. Have a blessed evening
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Date: 6/9/2021 12:53:00 AM
I am grateful to you, Lasaad, your welcoming words are well received my friend, Aloha!
Date: 6/1/2019 11:24:00 PM
So nicely composed. I can visualize vividly. All the Best.
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Date: 6/2/2019 12:43:00 AM
Thank you for sharing and more Anisha, Aloha William
Date: 6/1/2019 11:48:00 AM
You did extremely well with this sonnet. Myself, I have never written in that specific sonnet form, but yours is truly a very fine creation.. One I so enjoyed reading this fine and sunny new morn. A fav..
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Date: 6/1/2019 1:10:00 PM
I am humbled, as an afloat mind meanders lowly neath giants lest I disturb their thoughts, my thanks Robert, Aloha William
Date: 5/12/2019 1:26:00 PM
Nicely imaged and narrated, William. The bookending of the (key) first and last line works so well. Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 5/12/2019 1:32:00 PM
Yeah, I really like those repeats, haven't tried a triolet, next on my list, Thanks! Aloha wk

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