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The Watery Sun

the watery sun
fails to brighten the grey day- -
icy raindrops fall

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Poet Destroyer A

December 25, 2011 at 10:41 PM

Jack,,, once again, hope you are enjoying... May the magic of writing fill your days here on the soup.. May all your dreams come true this holiday season. I hope you are enjoying the blessings that Christmas brings.. filling our hearts with hope and joy, just take care of yourself... once again enjoyed your poem,,always,..p.d.

Poet Destroyer A

November 24, 2011 at 12:34 AM

JACK, ;-) stopping by to wish you and everyone a happy THANKSGIVING! ENJOYED YOUR POEM,, `" Have yourself a wonderful and lovely holiday. God Bless,.. p.d.

Barbara Gorelick

November 19, 2011 at 5:36 PM

gloomy! Well done, a tardy congrats. BG

Andrea Dietrich

November 17, 2011 at 3:51 PM

oh, yes, I remember this one, Jack. Congrats on your win, my friend.

Carol Sunshine Brown

November 17, 2011 at 11:23 AM

Congratulations Jack on your win in this Haiku contest of Debbie Guzzi. Love, Carol

Debbie Guzzi

November 10, 2011 at 2:05 PM

nothing wrong with this Jack...dreamy..I think my teacher might say what is a watery sun though...that's what YOU decided it looked like...but MUCH MUCH improvement [the sun fails to brighten the grey day--icy raindrops fall] light & love

Carolyn Devonshire

November 9, 2011 at 12:52 PM

Very unique description. Love the concept of a "watery sun" causing the ice to turn to rain. As much as I love snow and rain, sleet I can live without. Wonderful haiku, my friend. Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

November 8, 2011 at 11:55 PM

Sun is sure being nasty in this one!! Nicely done.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

November 8, 2011 at 4:27 PM

oh this is tremendous.. very vivid and visual to read.. luv that title..good luck in the contest.. u just reminded me of my break lines..which I forgot ..oh..luv..